GE 117 Composition I Week 4 – Principles of Revision and Proofreading

Week 3 Review  Last week we discussed the role of a Paragraph in the writing process.  A paragraph is a self-contained unit of writing. All effective writing is built upon paragraph development.  A paragraph is defined by what it does, now what it looks like.

Week 3 Review  A Paragraph is organized around a central idea. This idea is usually expressed via a Topic Sentence.  The rest of the Paragraph is arranged by a specific form of organization.  Common Organizational Patterns include Simple-Complex, Chronological, Spatial, and Emphatic.

Week 3 Review  Homework Assignment : A Childhood Memory.  One Paragraph of 8-12 sentences on a Childhood Memory.  Make use of specific details.  Make use of a specific Organizational Pattern.

Week 4 Objectives  Describe and utilize the stages and principles of Revision in the Writing Process  Review Editing and Proofreading techniques to reduce the frequency of typos.  Utilize and practice navigating electronic sources of information, including the Internet and the Virtual Library

Week 4 - Revision Q: What is the difference between revising, editing, and proofreading? A: Revision is about adding, subtracting, reshaping or reforming a First Draft. Editing is about correcting syntax, grammar, and mechanics. Editing is about correcting syntax, grammar, and mechanics. Proofreading is about finding and fixing spelling mistakes, homonyms, and typos. Proofreading is about finding and fixing spelling mistakes, homonyms, and typos.

Week 4 - Revision There are generally 3 stages you move through as you attempt to Revise a rough draft: Stage 1: Revise for Overall Meaning Stage 2: Revise for Paragraph development Stage 3: Revise for Sentences and Words

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Overall Meaning Stage 1 of Revision requires you to look at the “Big Picture”. You should compare your draft to your initial planning/prewriting. You should ask yourself some key questions (see pages in Longman Writer)

Week 4 - Revision How well did you meet your intended objective(s)? How appropriate was your tone and diction? How well did you address the needs/expectations of your audience? According to what organizational method is your draft structured? What are the main ideas of the essay?

Week 4 - Revison Revising for Overall Meaning is similar to the first stage of home renovation – you must pay attention to the large scale structures first (foundation, framing, etc), before moving on to any smaller scale. Otherwise, your essay might be like a poorly built house - perhaps pretty to look at, but unstable and unsuitable to live in.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Paragraph Development Once you have paid attention to Overall Meaning, you should move through each individual paragraph, one by one. This is similar to fixing things in a home floor by floor, once we are sure the Overall Structure and Foundation are solid.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Paragraph Development As you move from each paragraph to the next, many of the questions you asked in Stage 1 reappear and some new ones emerge. See pages in Longman Writer.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Paragraph Development Do all Paragraphs support the essay’s Thesis (Main Idea) or do any contradict/undermine? How is each Paragraph organized? Does the Pattern make sense? What is each Paragraph’s Main Idea? Is there a Topic Sentence?

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Paragraph Development Does each Paragraph make use of specific details, ideas, examples, or are some vague/unspecific? How are the Paragraphs sequenced in the essay? Does the Pattern make sense? Is there an Introduction and Conclusion Paragraph?

Week 4 Revision Revising for Sentences and Words The last scale of Revision is the smallest – we focus on sentence and words last. This stage of Revision is liking making aesthetic improvements to a house – paint, tiles, carpets, etc. But it must always come last! You don’t paint a wall or a door that might get knocked down!

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Sentences and Words After moving through your individual paragraphs (or while you move through them), you can choose to “sharpen” individual sentences and words to make your overall essay a better product.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Sentences and Words At this smallest scale, you should focus on some common concerns (see page 118 in Longman Writer). At this smallest scale, you should focus on some common concerns (see page 118 in Longman Writer). Having your prewriting and planning available will help you compare what you’ve got on paper with what you “wanted” to write.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Sentences and Words Tone – Compared to your planning, how is your Tone and Diction? Do any words or sentences not “fit in?” Economy – Have you used as few words as necessary to express your ideas, or do you find yourself using far more than necessary?

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Sentences and Words Type Variety – Good writers will use a variety of Sentence Types- Simple, Compound, and Complex. Avoid using only 1 sentence type. (See pages in Longman Writer.) Type Variety – Good writers will use a variety of Sentence Types- Simple, Compound, and Complex. Avoid using only 1 sentence type. (See pages in Longman Writer.) Length and Tempo – Good writers mix and match different sentence lengths to ensure a readable rhythm. Length and Tempo – Good writers mix and match different sentence lengths to ensure a readable rhythm.

Week 4 - Revision Revising for Sentences and Words Specific – Do sentences use real, genuine examples/ideas, or are they vague/general? Active – For the most part, do sentences use Action Verbs, or Passive Verbs (to be, to seem, to feel, etc.) Good writing is full of Action, not Being!

Week 4 - Revision Editing and Proofreading After you have moved through the 3 stages of revision, you should focus on Editing and Proofreading. Editing is concerned with syntax and grammar, while Proofreading is concerned with spelling mistakes and typos.

Week 4 - Revision Editing and Proofreading Here are some useful tips: 1) Put your draft away for at least 24 hours. You can’t find your mistakes right after you’ve written something. 2) Get feedback! Always have a second pair of eyes look for mistakes you won’t (or can’t) be able to find.

Week 4 -Revision Editing and Proofreading 3) Always work from typed text, with margins and double spacing. It makes reading easier, and allows corrections to be clear and visible. 4) Read your draft aloud. Your mind “skips over” mistakes your voice would stumble upon. Mistakes are more clear when you read aloud.

Week 4 - Revision Editing and Proofreading 5) Use (but never rely on) Grammar and Spell Checkers. All word processing software has them, but they can’t catch everything. 6) Know thyself. If you are bad at spelling (or grammar, punctuation, etc) admit it, allocate more time to check your work, and have good spellers help you!

Week 4 - Revision Editing and Proofreading 7) Be aware of commonly misspelled words and homonyms (words that sound alike but are spelled differently) such as They’re, Their, There, and Where, wear, were. They account for a large percentage of all errors. 8) Become familiar with Proofreader Marks (see page 136 in Longman Writer) that are commonly used.

Week 4 - Revision Editing and Proofreading 9) Pay attention to detail. When you have many small mistakes, they often speak volumes more about you (and your work ethic) than 1 large mistake would. 10) Strive to improve. Be honest, know your weak areas, and always try to get better. Some of the world’s best writers were also the worst spellers! But they improved!

Week 4 - Revision Homework Assignment - Page 142, Activity 1 in Longman Writer. - Page 142, Activity 1 in Longman Writer. - Read the letter, and make some notes and/or corrections in your textbook. - Read the letter, and make some notes and/or corrections in your textbook. - Rewrite and retype the letter. Keep the purpose of the letter the same, but fix any and all errors you can locate. - Rewrite and retype the letter. Keep the purpose of the letter the same, but fix any and all errors you can locate. - Typed, double spaced, Font Typed, double spaced, Font 12.