OTHERWISE KNOWN AS WRITING A TWO CHUNK PARAGRAPH Adding a Second Chunk of Evidence to Your Arguments

Remember: Your paragraphs are arguments Your arguments will be more effective and convincing if they have multiple pieces of evidence.  Review your “bull’s eye” (aka: TS)  Find more evidence for the idea

Practice—Add a “chunk” Steinbeck uses Lennie’s innocence and childishness to emphasize man’s desire for friendship throughout Of Mice and Men. After Crooks teases Lennie, Lennie begins to doubt if his long-time companion will return from the whore house: “’He won’t do it,’ Lennie cried, ‘George wouldn’t do nothing like that. I’ve been with George a long time. He’ll come back tonight- but the doubt was too much for him, ‘don’t you think he will?’” (71). Lennie’s crying out like a child shows that he fears being separated from George. At first, he is sure that his bond with George is strong and that George will return because they have been together forever. But, his innocence consumes him and he is flooded with doubt. INSERT SECOND CHUNK HERE Lennie’s dependence on George shows the value he places on companionship.

Find a relevant CD When else has Lennie acted “innocent” and “childish”? Make sure that Lennie’s actions clearly connect to the theme of friendship. Work with a partner to find a CD.  Copy the CD directly into your notes

The Second CD Analyze the second CD.  Unpack the important phrases  Unpack the important images  Analyze connotations of key words  Make connections Put it all together and write several lines of CM at the bottom of the page.

Develop your TS Review your analysis of the second CD. Ask yourself:  Is my analysis of this second CD really connected to the idea in my TS?  Does this second CD really make my argument more convincing?  Do I need to develop my TS, redefine my “bull’s eye,” to better reflect my more developed ideas?

Add transitions Add a transition to the second chunk. Remember, transitions to CDs usually include  Background information (when and where)  Speaker  Audience Transitions should also weave together your language and words with the quotation’s language.

Adding a Chunk Add a transition between the last line of CM for the first chunk and the lead in for the second chunk.  This transition may look something like:  Lennie’s naivety is also shown through his spoken words.  Additionally, Lennie demonstrates his simple mindedness when he interacts with the other characters.  You could also combine your transition from the first chunk to the second with the lead in to your second CD. This type of transition might look like:  Once again Lennie shows his child-like personality after he tells George, “……….”

Your Turn Now look at your concrete detail.  How can you transition from chunk 1 to chunk 2?  Do you need a transition and a lead in or can you combine the two parts? Write your transition and your lead in

Concluding your Paragraph Review your original CS. Does it need to be revised to reflect your stronger argument? Does it reflect the depth added by the second chunk?

Your Turn Review the original concluding sentence: Lennie’s dependence on George shows the value he places on companionship. Rewrite the CS to reflect the chunk that you added to the paragraph