Activity 1.7: Time Writing– Choosing a topic and drafting a personal narrative

Coherence  Is the clear and orderly presentation of ideas in a paragraph or essay.

Internal Coherence  Refers to the coherence WITHIN a paragraph.

External Coherence  Refers to the coherence BETWEEN paragraphs and relates to the entire essay.

Writing Groups  You can get feedback for revision in a writing group.  All members work collaboratively to respond to one another’s writing and to help each other through the revision process by asking clarifying questions.  Writing groups use sharing and responding as a revision strategy to communicate with another person or a small group of peers about suggestions in order to improve writing.  It is the responsibility of the members of the writing group to help each other develop quality writing.

Roles of the Participants in the Writing Groups:  The Reader Reads the text silently, then aloud. Begins the conversation after reading.  The Listener(s) Takes notes and prepare open-ended questions for the writer or make constructive statements.  The Writer Listens to their draft and takes notes. Responds to questions. Asks the writing group questions.

Preparing for a Writing Prompt:  Tip One: Address all aspects of the prompt. Make sure you understand what the prompt is asking you to do.  Tip Two: Pace Yourself. You will have _______ minutes to write your essay. How many minutes will you use for each phase? ○ _________ Prewrite: Plan my essay and generate ideas. ○ _________ Draft: Put my plan into action and get my narrative on paper. ○ _________ Revise/Edit: Make sure my narrative is as clear as possible for my readers.

Preparing for a Writing Prompt:  Tip Three: Plan Your Essay. Think back the brainstorm you completed regarding choices and consequences. Select one incident in which you made a choice. ○ Use a prewriting strategy to create a plan for your draft. Consider creating a web, a plot diagram (exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, resolution), or an outline.

Writing Prompt:  Write a multi-paragraph (3) narrative about an incident where you made a choice in life. Include information about the choice you made and the consequences of your action. Be sure to: Include the elements of incident, response, and reflection. Use transitions to connect ideas for your reader. Include insights about the effects and consequences of the choice.

Paragraphs 1. Incident 2. Response 3. Reflection

Sensory Details  Language that appeals to one or more of the five senses– sight, hearing, touch, taste, and smell.  When I walked in to the restaurant with Jeanine, it reminded me of waking up to the sound of bacon crackling and the smell of pancakes on a Saturday morning back at home. As my mouth began to water, I became homesick.

Figurative Language  Language used in an imaginative way to express ideas that are not literally true.  It is used for effect, such as, personification, metaphor, simile, and hyperbole.

Metaphor  An indirect comparison or a direct comparison that uses the form of the verb “to be,” which is usually is or are.  My life is a nightmare (=direct metaphor).

Simile  A direct comparison using the words like or as.  You are as busy as a bee. You are being compared to a bee.

Hyperbole  An exaggerated statement. My backpack weighs a ton. ○ It doesn’t literally weigh a ton… that would be impossible.

Language and Writer’s Craft: Coherence  When responding to a writing prompt, it is important to consider the coherence of your writing. Transitions within and between paragraphs create coherence.  Transitions that you might use to move from idea to idea include: then, next, later, after that, toward the end, in the end, additionally, nevertheless, in addition, however, finally, moreover. There are many additional transitions you might use. Please see the Activity 1.6 packet for more.

Prioritize the Prompt  Circle the KEY verbs in the prompt. The verbs identify what you will do.  Underline the nouns. The nouns identify what you will write about.  List the verb next to the nouns. This list prioritizes what you have to do when you write in response to this prompt. You it as a checklist to ensure you have met all the requirements.

Prioritizing the Prompt:  Verbs Write Include Use Include  Nouns A narrative about a choice you made in life Information about the choice and consequence Elements of incident, response, reflection Transitions to connect ideas for your reader Effects of the consequence Sensory details and figurative language

Personal Narrative Structure  Incident What happened? What was the choice you made in life?  Response What were your feelings or thoughts about people involved? What were your feelings or thoughts about the event?  Reflection Thinking back, what was the lesson you learned from this experience? How will you use this lesson in the future?

Incident  Be sure to include: The choice you made Who was there? What happened? Where did it happen? Describe the setting. Include sensory details and figurative language

Planning and Prewriting: 60 minutes  Plan your essay and generate ideas using a prewriting strategy. Brainstorming Web Outline Plot Diagram

Writing Prompt:  Write a multi-paragraph (3) narrative about an incident where you made a choice in life. Include information about the choice you made and the consequences of your action. Be sure to: Include the elements of incident, response, and reflection. Use transitions to connect ideas for your reader. Include insights about the effects and consequences of the choice.

Internal & External Coherence  When reading for internal coherence, make sure that each paragraph is organized and clearly written using transitions and parallel structure. When reading for external coherence, check that the entire text uses transitions to move smoothly from one major idea to another in a logical way.

Writing Prompt:  Write a multi-paragraph (3) narrative about an incident where you made a choice in life. Include information about the choice you made and the consequences of your action. Be sure to: Include the elements of incident, response, and reflection. Use transitions to connect ideas for your reader. Include insights about the effects and consequences of the choice.

Paragraphs 1. Incident 2. Response 3. Reflection

Revising Rough Draft Type your draft ○ 12 point font, Times New Roman ○ Double spaced Format Paragraph Line spacing=double ○ Heading Your Name English 7 Ms. Kernan 30 March 2016 ○ Title  Circle all transitions  Underline figurative language and sensory details

Writing Groups: 1 st Period Group 1 Bryce: Reader Emma: Writer (your essay is read) Kade: Listener #1 Lindsey: Listener #2 Matthew: Misspelled Words Group 2 Dakota: Reader Nik: Writer (your essay is read) Hailey: Listener #1 Hollister: Listener #2 Lukas: Misspelled Words Group 3 Justyce: Reader Quentin: Writer (your essay is read) Ivey: Listener #1 Erika: Listener #2 Group 4 Wyatt: Reader Dawson: Writer (your essay is read) Xavier: Listener #1 Ashlyn: Listener #2 Group 5 Luke: Reader Tallen: Writer (your essay is read) Lexi: Listener #1 Matthan: Listener #2 Group 6 Colton: Reader Rayna: Writer (your essay is read) Alex: Listener #1 Blake: Listener #2

Writing Groups: 4 th Period Group 1 Isaiah A: Reader Cassie: Writer (your essay is read) Owen: Listener #1 Steelie: Listener #2 Nicholas: Misspelled Words Group 2 Ashley: Reader Gunnar: Writer (your essay is read) Christine: Listener #1 Dalas: Listener #2 Kaden: Misspelled Words Group 3 Tagen: Reader Nick: Writer (your essay is read) Josh: Listener #1 Erica: Listener #2 Group 4 Isaiah C: Reader Ava: Writer (your essay is read) Sebastian: Listener #1 Baylee: Listener #2 Group 5 Jenny: Reader Christian: Writer (your essay is read) Chloe: Listener #1 Ryan: Listener #2 Group 6 Linnea: Reader Cole: Writer (your essay is read) Andrew: Listener #1 Natalie: Listener #2

Roles of the Participants in the Writing Groups:  The Reader Reads the text silently, then aloud. Begins the conversation after reading.  The Listener(s) Takes notes and prepare open-ended questions for the writer or make constructive statements.  The Writer Listens to their draft and takes notes. Responds to questions. Asks the writing group questions.

Revising Your Essay: Review your notes from your writing group. Based on the feedback you received, create a revision plan by responding thoughtfully to the following:  After rereading your draft and meeting with your writing group, what do you like best about your personal narrative? Why?  At this point, what do you think could be improved? Why?  After reading my draft, I realized that in the next draft I should revise _______________________________________ because ____________________________________________________ ______.

Check Your Understanding 1. Describe how to respond to a writing prompt. 2. Explain how a writing group can help you improve writing.

Revise/Edit