Let’s make our school a more wonderful place! (A writing lesson of Grade Eight) ——by qinlibin Let’s make our school a more wonderful place! (A writing lesson of Grade Eight) ——by qinlibin

What do you think of your school? Our school is clean and beautiful. Our school is a beautiful garden,there are many kinds of flowers and trees. I’m proud of our school because it’s one of the most famous schools in Shanghai. Our school is a modern school with many new buildings and equipments.

Let’s make our school a more wonderful place! 写作身份 who 确定范围 range 明确内容 content 审题 Topic

1.Our school is a wonderful place. Why do you think so? 2. What problems have you found at school? 3. What do you suggest to make our school a more wonderful place? 理解写作提示 Let ’ s make our school a more wonderful place! opinions problems sugestions

Showing opinions What do you think of your school? What do you think of your school? I think … From my point of view, … According to me, … In my opinion/eyes, … Personally Our school is clean and beautiful. Our school is a modern school with many new buildings and equipments. Our school is a beautiful garden,there are many kinds of flowers and trees. I’m proud of our school because it’s one of the most famous schools in Shanghai.

What problems have you found at school? What problems have you found at school? Free talk However, there are still some problems…

What problems have you found at school? What problems have you found at school? Free talk

Some students pick flowers they like in the garden. Although there are many rubbish bins, some students leave rubbish here and there. When others want to read books quietly, some students speak loudly in the library. Some of the students copy others ’ homework to cheat their teachers and parents. topic sentence 主题句 Example1 Example2 Example 3 Example 4 Some students don ’ t behave well enough. Supporting sentences

The school environment isn’t nice enough. There is much noise around our school. That makes us upset when we have lessons. The air around our school is polluted because the cars let out harmful smoke near our school. coherent( 一致的 )

School environment isn’t nice enough School service need to be improved We have fewer activities There are not enough green plants. Some students copy their homework The lunch food is not delicious Some students chase each other after class Some students are not polite to their teachers We have no time to play with friends We can’t borrow enough books Students don’t behave well enough school life is not enjoyable enough. There’s too much homework

We had better (not) do … We can do…by doing/not doing… We ought (not) to do… I think it’s a good idea to… We are not allowed to… … suggest( that) sb. (should) do… suggest doing

Let’s make our school a more wonderful place! opinions I think (I am proud of ) / In my opinion (eyes) According to / From my point of view Personally/… problems However,… what’s more /In addition/Besides… sugestions I’d suggest (that) sb. ( should) do/ suggest doing We’d better (not)do/ We ought (not)do/ We should (not)do/ It’s a good idea (not) to do/ We can do…by (not) doing /… conclusion In a word / All in all/ So… Express ideas clearly and logically · Useful patterns · Coherent topic sentence & supporting sentences

Let’s have a try! I’m proud of our school for its nice environment, modern equipments and long history. However, there are still some problems. ________________________________ ________________________________ ________________________________. ________________________________. ( Suggestions:) ______________________________________________________________________ ( Conclusion:) ___________________________________ ___________________________________ _____________________ (60-80 words)

Write at least words on the passage: 1. What do you think of our earth? 2. Do you find any problem existing on the earth? 3.What do you suggest to make our earth much greener? Assignment:Assignment: Let’s make our earth much greener.