A CLOSER LOOK Scored Student Examples

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1.Pick up one packet (PSSA ENGLISH LANGUAGE ARTS) Text-Dependent Analysis Question Student Responses. (They are located on top of the bookcase in the front of the room) 2.Write your names and section on the top of the packet. 3.Follow the instructions in this slide show. Everything you need to know and do is in this presentation. Read every word on every slide. If the slide doesn’t say it, don’t do it!

On a previous PSSA, students were asked to read a drama (play) about Florence Nightingale’s life. After the reading they were given the following text-dependent analysis question. Click to read the prompt. The drama focuses on events in the life of Florence Nightingale. Write an essay analyzing how the three-scene structure of the drama emphasizes certain characteristics of Florence. Use evidence from the drama to support your response.

Locate this prompt on the front page of your packet (beside number 11). Highlight key words in the prompt. DO NOT move on to the next slide until you have highlighted key words. The drama focuses on events in the life of Florence Nightingale. Write an essay analyzing how the three-scene structure of the drama emphasizes certain characteristics of Florence. Use evidence from the drama to support your response. Read the prompt again. This time analyze it to determine how the students should respond. What information are they required to explain and support? Even though you have not read the drama, you can still analyze and discuss the prompt!

The drama focuses on events in the life of Florence Nightingale. Write an essay analyzing how the three-scene structure of the drama emphasizes certain characteristics of Florence. Use evidence from the drama to support your response. Which words did you highlight? How did you do?

The drama focuses on events in the life of Florence Nightingale. Write an essay analyzing how the three-scene structure of the drama emphasizes certain characteristics of Florence. Use evidence from the drama to support your response. If you were writing this essay, how would you organize it? What do you think each body paragraph should be about? In the margin or at the bottom of the front page of the packet, write what you think should be the focus of each body paragraph.

The drama focuses on events in the life of Florence Nightingale. Write an essay analyzing how the three-scene structure of the drama emphasizes certain characteristics of Florence. Use evidence from the drama to support your response. Body 1 = Scene 1 + Characteristic of Florence Body 2 = Scene 2 + Characteristic of Florence Body 3 = Scene 3 + Characteristic of Florence Because there are three scenes in the drama, it makes sense that each body paragraph would represent a scene. Does this make sense?

Let’s analyze a top-scoring student response. Circle the name of the drama. Underline the question rewritten as a statement. Highlight the thesis statement – one sentence that states what the rest of the essay will be about. You can learn a lot from a well-written example. Read the first paragraph (the introduction) of the student example that is located in the box on the first page of the packet. Notice what information is included. Introduction

Circle characteristic(s) of Florence that are identified in the first scene. Look for adjectives that describe Florence. Highlight direct quotations. Underline the student’s explanation (in his/her own words) of how this characteristic of Florence is shown in the first scene. Body Paragraph 1 Read the first body paragraph carefully. Notice what information is included.

Circle characteristic(s) of Florence that are identified in this scene. Look for adjectives that describe Florence. Highlight direct quotations. Underline the student’s explanation (in his/her own words) of how this characteristic of Florence is shown in the second scene. Body Paragraph 2 Read this body paragraph carefully. Notice what information is included.

Circle characteristic(s) of Florence that are identified in this scene. Look for adjectives that describe Florence. Highlight direct quotations. Underline the student’s explanation (in his/her own words) of how this characteristic of Florence is shown in the third scene. Body Paragraph 3 Read this body paragraph carefully. Notice what information is included.

Notice how the writer summarizes the purpose of the essay without repeating it exactly as it was stated in the introduction. Also notice the additional information that wraps up the essay with a satisfying ending! Read the last paragraph (the conclusion) of the student example. Notice what information is included. Conclusion

Read the annotation (gray box) after the student essay. The annotation explains the reasons why this essay received the highest score. Read it together and discuss what you learned about writing text-dependent analysis questions. When you finish, read the other student examples and annotations in the packet.

What did you learn? On a piece of notebook paper write your name and section. (You will do this individually.) Answer these questions in complete sentences: (Some answers will require more than one sentence!) 1.Write three things you learned during this activity. 2.Write two “ah-ah” moments or things that you found especially helpful or interesting. 3.Write one question you still have about writing text-dependent analysis responses.

Make sure your name is on your notebook paper, and place the notebook paper and your group packet in the correct ELA section on top of the filing cabinet in the back of the room.