Pre-AP and 7 th ELA Nov. 10 Expository Essay Workshop/ Focus:Peer Editing (clocking) and revision

In your Journals Compare and contrast your favorite celebrations with your family.

Vocab Pre-AP Only  Complete activites 3 &4 for Unit 5 this week.  Third activity for Tuesday: 63  Fourth activity For Thursday:64

Learning Target  Today we will: clock expository essays  So we can: create our own expository essay  I will know I have it when I can:Peer Edit an expository essay.

½ Similarity/Body paragraph format  Topic sentence  First similarity  Explanation/proof of first similarity  Second reason  Explanation/proof of second similarity  Third similarity  Explanation/proof of third similarity  Transition to contrast paragraph *Don’t forget transitions

Class 1/2 :1 st Body Paragraph Topic Sentence. Examples and Support

½ Contrast/Body paragraph format  Topic sentence  First contrast  Explanation/proof of first contrast  Second contrast  Explanation/proof of second contrast  Third contrast  Explanation/proof of third contrast  Statement about why one is better than other *Don’t forget transitions

Class 1/2 :2 nd Body Paragraph Topic Sentence. Examples and Support

½ Conclusion *It brings a sense of closure to the essay  What did you say? (literal)  What does it mean?(interpretive)  Why does it matter?/Why is it important? (universal)

½ Introduction (thesis at end)  Hook  Connection btw hook and thesis  Thesis statement  We create the introduction after we have written the paper. It goes first in the essay, but think about it: How do you introduce something before you know what it says?

Big Don’ts In Body Paragraphs  Don’t use circular reasoning (or “talk in circles”).  Don’t repeat the same idea over and over.  Don’t simply list reasons without giving examples.  Don’t be vague. Be specific.

Put it all together in order First Half  Intro ¶  Hook  Connection  Thesis  First Body ¶  Topic  Transitions  Supporting information  Commentary Second Half  First Body ¶  Topic  Transitions  Supporting information  Commentary  Conclusion  What did you say?  What does it mean?  Why does it matter?/Why is it important?

Now you: On your electronic device  Compare and contrast two figures that you have studied in Texas history.  The format is  Introduction with thesis at the end (slide #8)  Comparison paragraph (slide #11)  Contrast paragraph (slide #13)  Conclusion (slide #14)  Scroll through this power point on moodle to make sure you have the correct organization for each paragraph.  Utilize your family for help.

Revising  Compare/contrast transitions  Concluding transitions  Varied sentence structure  Review with another family to make sure your essay answered the prompt effectively

Thesis Statement  Did I answer the question? Re-reading the question prompt after constructing a working thesis can help you fix an argument that misses the focus of the question.  Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? If your thesis simply states facts that no one would, or even could, disagree with, it’s possible that you are simply providing a summary, rather than making an argument.  Is my thesis statement specific enough?

Every Essay  White background/black ink  12 Pt font  Times New Roman, Courier New, Calibri  Title (centered)  Left aligned  Insert Header (left side)  First Last Name  Period #  Date  Double space  No extra spaces between paragraphs  Indent paragraphs

 What is the best format for my essay?  How do my examples prove my point?  How does my commentary explain how my examples prove my point?  Why are transitions essential to good writing?  Why use appositives in writing?  How can coordinating conjunctions improve our writing?

 Move according to directions.  As you make comments, please be sure to make your suggestions clear and concise (that means short.)  Yes, you are making tabs on the essay.

 First we are going to make suggestions to the author about making the expository better.

 Does it have solid thesis? If it does, you do not need to leave a comment, or you can make a note telling them you like the thesis.  If it doesn’t, can you make a comment with a suggestion for a good thesis? If you can’t think of one, comment that they might consider adding one here.  When instructed, move to next desk according to the plan we discussed.

 Does it have topic sentence?  Move when instructed  Does is have an example that proves the topic sentence?  Does it have commentary that demonstrates how the example proves the thesis?  Have they transitioned to the next paragraph logically? Move when instructed

 Does it have topic sentence?  Does is have an example that proves the topic sentence?  Does it have commentary that demonstrates how the example proves the thesis?  Have they transitioned to the next paragraph logically? Move when instructed

 What did you say?  What does it mean?  Why does it matter?/Why is it important?  When instructed, move to next desk according to the plan we discussed.

 Does it give specific names and details? Or does is speak in generalities?  If it does, make a comment /give suggestions.

 Spelling- Check backward (spell it correctly if you can.)  Move when instructed  Capitalization-is it a name or beginning of sentence?  Move when instructed  Punctuation-Do they have complete sentences?  Move when instructed  Paragraphs  Do they have paragraphs  Thesis, Topic, Topic, Conclusion  Do the topics link back to the thesis and conclusion?

 Review the notes made on your paper.

 Thesis  Body  Topic Sentence  Supporting example  Commentary that explains example  Transition  Body  Topic Sentence  Supporting example  Commentary that explains example  Conclusion  Why is it important  Why does it matter?