Essay assessment. General Assessment - Grade: D This is, quite frankly, an awful essay, and it is only our charitable nature that moves it up from an.

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Essay assessment

General Assessment - Grade: D This is, quite frankly, an awful essay, and it is only our charitable nature that moves it up from an F to a D. This is, quite frankly, an awful essay, and it is only our charitable nature that moves it up from an F to a D. It is a long essay, but length does not make up for a lack of a central thesis or organization. Neither does showing that you have read the subject. The author includes many economic terms, evidently to prove some knowledge on the subject. But, the essay never gets around to answering the question posed. It is a long essay, but length does not make up for a lack of a central thesis or organization. Neither does showing that you have read the subject. The author includes many economic terms, evidently to prove some knowledge on the subject. But, the essay never gets around to answering the question posed. In our assessment the author did not take the time to think about the question and develop her own ideas and answer. That’s a major flaw. In our assessment the author did not take the time to think about the question and develop her own ideas and answer. That’s a major flaw.

The technical aspects are also horrendous; the formatting is awful; the essay lacks a title and a name. (We can understand why the author didn’t want her name on it.) The margins are too small. There are many grammatical mistakes. The technical aspects are also horrendous; the formatting is awful; the essay lacks a title and a name. (We can understand why the author didn’t want her name on it.) The margins are too small. There are many grammatical mistakes.

Specific Comments There is no thesis statement. What’s the answer to the question? In the first paragraph she moves from one position to another, contradicting her previous arguments. There is no thesis statement. What’s the answer to the question? In the first paragraph she moves from one position to another, contradicting her previous arguments. There are logical problems: “I think the self- serving reason... is more important...and thus, the self serving reason is more important.” doesn’t work logically. There are logical problems: “I think the self- serving reason... is more important...and thus, the self serving reason is more important.” doesn’t work logically. The sentences are too long; there is much redundancy and ambiguity, and there are too few paragraphs. The sentences are too long; there is much redundancy and ambiguity, and there are too few paragraphs.

The sentence “...then everyone can understand them, and they can understand each other” is totally confusing. Who can understand whom? The sentence “...then everyone can understand them, and they can understand each other” is totally confusing. Who can understand whom? The sentences are wordy. For example, in paragraph 2 it would be sufficient for the author to say “open dialogue.” Use of “clear” and “complete” is ridiculous and borderline redundant. “Insurmountable difficulties” is an exaggeration, and “sufficiently acceptable” is redundant. The sentences are wordy. For example, in paragraph 2 it would be sufficient for the author to say “open dialogue.” Use of “clear” and “complete” is ridiculous and borderline redundant. “Insurmountable difficulties” is an exaggeration, and “sufficiently acceptable” is redundant. There are sentence fragments and run-on sentences. For example in paragraph 2, “The whole theory of the principle of rational choice theory which says that one should do that which yields the maximum utility according to your self interest which is to say that selfishness is the thing that drives most people” may be long, but it is not a complete sentence. The sentence second from the bottom of this paragraph is a run-on. “economics terminology can’t really...” should be separated from the preceding sentence by a semicolon or a period rather than a comma. The first sentence of the last paragraph is a fragment. There are sentence fragments and run-on sentences. For example in paragraph 2, “The whole theory of the principle of rational choice theory which says that one should do that which yields the maximum utility according to your self interest which is to say that selfishness is the thing that drives most people” may be long, but it is not a complete sentence. The sentence second from the bottom of this paragraph is a run-on. “economics terminology can’t really...” should be separated from the preceding sentence by a semicolon or a period rather than a comma. The first sentence of the last paragraph is a fragment.

In paragraph 2, “Marginal utility” of what is “low”? In paragraph 2, “Marginal utility” of what is “low”? The author’s listing of the three important barriers to entry did nothing to further her argument. Develop only those points that matter. The author’s listing of the three important barriers to entry did nothing to further her argument. Develop only those points that matter. The author uses “also” to tack on a sentence about the free rider problem that did not belong in that paragraph at all. The author uses “also” to tack on a sentence about the free rider problem that did not belong in that paragraph at all. Paragraph 3 begins with a sentence fragment. Paragraph 3 begins with a sentence fragment.

In paragraph 3, the second sentence is useless. Obviously, “this” will “cause” a “consequence.” All consequences are caused. In paragraph 3, the second sentence is useless. Obviously, “this” will “cause” a “consequence.” All consequences are caused. In paragraph 3 there is a problem of subject pronoun agreement. “Each” should be followed by “his” or “her,” never “they.” In paragraph 3 there is a problem of subject pronoun agreement. “Each” should be followed by “his” or “her,” never “they.” There are many more mistakes but the above list gives you a good idea of why the paper received a D. There are many more mistakes but the above list gives you a good idea of why the paper received a D.