Dressups Ms. Sanders

A Comparison

Another Comparison “The girl used her phone.” “The young girl, who looked like an angel because her delighted smile was glowing, tapped silently on her yellow smart phone while her friend looked over her shoulder and smiled too.”

Dress-ups – 6 in all 1.Who/Which Clause 2.Strong Verb 3.Adverb 4.Because Clause 5.Awesome Adjectives 6.When, where, while, since, as, if, although clauses

Dress-ups – 6 in all Now let’s look at “The girl used her phone.” and dress it up! I’m going to dress it up in “happiness.” In your journal, you need to dress it up with slightly different words than I do but keep it happy.

Dress-up #1 – Who/Which Adds information about a person or thing Example: The girl used her phone. Becomes The girl, who looked like an angel, used her phone.

Dress-up #2 – Strong Verb Creates a heightened, more accurate sense of action and purpose Example: The girl, who looked like an angel, used her phone. Becomes The girl, who looked like an angel, tapped on her phone.

Dress-up #3 – Adverbs Spices up an action Example: The girl, who looked like an angel, tapped on her phone. Becomes The girl, who looked like an angel, tapped enthusiastically on her phone.

Dress-up #4 – Because Clause Gives cause and effect Example: The girl, who looked like an angel, tapped silently on her phone. Becomes The girl, who looked like an angel because her smile shone brightly, tapped enthusiastically on her phone.

Dress-up #5 – Adjectives Creates distinct and unique pictures of nouns Example: The girl, who looked like an angel because her smile shone brightly, tapped silently at her phone. Becomes The young girl, who looked like an angel because her delighted smile shone brightly, tapped silently on her yellow smart phone.

Dress-up #6 – Clauses “When, where, while, since, as, if, although” clauses add dimension Example: The young girl, who looked like an angel because her delighted smile shone brightly, tapped silently on her yellow smart phone. Becomes The young girl, who looked like an angel because her delighted smile shone brightly, tapped silently on her yellow smart phone while her friend looked over her shoulder and smiled too.

Dress-ups – 6 in all So, the sentence “The girl used her phone” became: “The young girl, who looked like an angel because her delighted smile shone brightly, tapped silently on her yellow smart phone while her friend looked over her shoulder and smiled too.” Please zombiefy this sentence in your journal. Add a notation to point out each dressup.