Elaboration Grade 8 Lesson 2 Elaborate in your own essay writing Copyright © 2015 Write Score LLC

REVIEW Elaboration means to: tell the reader more expand on the evidence give more details explain the reasoning behind the evidence The elaboration must be: Clear: Does the reader understand what you are trying to convey? Convincing: Are your details directly related to the evidence? Original: Have you reflected on how the evidence proves the point/claim you are making? Is the explanation in your own words? Did you avoid using a direct quote?

REVIEW: Techniques authors use to elaborate How do you elaborate on evidence?

Practice elaboration in your own writing Practice Read the article: “Proteins and Lipids”

Practice elaboration in your own writing Essay Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer.

MODELED PRACTICE: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: The body uses stored fats for energy. Evidence from the text: ____________ ________________________________ Elaboration: ________________________________ ________________________________ This is just an example. You can use other topic sentences as long as it answers the question in the task.

MODELED PRACTICE: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: The body uses stored fats for energy. Evidence from the text: Fatty acids provide the most calories per gram. Find evidence from the text that supports the topic sentence.

MODELED PRACTICE: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: The body uses stored fats for energy. Evidence from the text: Stored fats provide the most calories per gram. Elaboration: These fatty acids “provide 9 calories per gram.” This is much more than both carbohydrates and proteins. The body cannot get too much fat, however, or it will not be able to use it all. Most people need between 15 and 20% body fat. Add more detail. Provide the reader with more information to support the Topic Sentence and the Evidence.

DO TOGETHER : Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: Proteins are not necessarily the best energy. Evidence from the text: ____________ ________________________________ Elaboration: ________________________________ ________________________________ Remember, this topic sentence needs to specifically address the essay question.

DO TOGETHER : Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: Proteins are not necessarily the best energy. Evidence from the text: ____________ ________________________________ Elaboration: ________________________________ ________________________________ Find evidence from the text that supports the topic sentence.

DO TOGETHER : Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: Proteins are not necessarily the best energy. Evidence from the text: Proteins only are used as the last source of energy.

DO TOGETHER: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: Proteins are not necessarily the best energy. Evidence from the text: Proteins only are used as the last source of energy. Elaboration: ________________________________ ________________________________ Add more detail to the evidence. Provide the reader with more information to support the Topic Sentence and the Evidence.

DO TOGETHER: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: Proteins are not necessarily the best energy. Evidence from the text: Proteins only are used as the last source of energy. Elaboration: Protein is most often used to “build and repair tissue, bones, and muscle.” This is why it is important to get a lot of protein if you are an athlete or on a strict workout program.

ON YOUR OWN: Write to explain how the body uses energy. Use details from the text to support your answer. Topic sentence: _______________________ _______________________ Evidence from the text: ________________________ ________________________ Elaboration: ________________________ ________________________ The topic sentence needs to specifically address the essay question. Find evidence from the text that supports the topic sentence. Add more detail to the evidence. Provide the reader with more information to support the Topic Sentence and the Evidence.

Look back at your past writing and see if there are places where you could add more elaboration. Independent Practice: