CM 107 UNIT 7 SEMINAR Considering the Mentor and Revising the Journey C. Danelski, Ph.D.

ARE THERE ANY QUESTIONS FROM UNIT 6? About the readings? About the discussion board assignments? Remember students should post simply the name of a person they feel is a fire giver, then answer the post of a fellow student to write about why they think someone whom another student posted was a fire giver. This is an interactive assignment! About the Unit 6 Project? Did you create a script for this project? There is an example of such a script in the Doc Sharing section of this course.

UNIT 7 ASSIGNMENTS Reading: “Editing and Revising” A Writing Center Links.pdf embedded in the Unit 7 Course Overview. The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing: Chapter 6: The Writing Process and Chapter 17: Grammar, Mechanics and Spelling The Scenario on mentors and revision. The Discussion Board: Revising your Unit 3 Project – Keep in mind you should post the Unit 3 Project you originally turned in and a revised version. (Students do not need to share the graded version if they do not wish to do so.)

REVISION Many revision issues exist, but divide revising tasks into three basic divisions: * Revise sentences for content (ideas) * Revise for grammar ; proofread aloud. * Revise for APA (if necessary)—check each citation and reference item for APA format. Remember to focus on the sources you are using. Avoid overwhelming yourself with information you don’t need right now. You may generate many drafts! The more you draft, the better the chance of catching errors and making the essay stronger.

SCHEDULE YOUR TIME Make a schedule for drafting and stick as closely to it as possible. Do not write the entire essay in one sitting. You can do it all if you begin now !

REMEMBER THE PROCESS... The most common way students get “lost” in the essay is by not following the process for writing. The topic, thesis, and outline have been parts of this process. The draft and receiving feedback will be important parts of the same process; all this work is connected. Take time to make time; create a schedule for your work so that you can juggle all the responsibilities in your life.

SEEKING HELP Ask for help when you need it! Your instructor is eager to help, but many times cannot help on the day before a project is due because there is not enough time. Also use the Kaplan Writing Center as part of your writing process from beginning to final draft. Let’s go to the Writing Center now!

DRAFTING Let’s look at how one student organized her work. On the next page, you’ll see a highlighted paragraph. The functions of each paragraph have been highlighted as: 1: Topic Sentence 2: Supporting Details 3. Closing Sentence

BODY PARAGRAPHS Example body paragraph (thesis key point 1): topic sentence, support, closing sentence At the outset, Internet publishing promises writers powerful representation from major book vendors. For example, many Internet publishers have deals with industry giants such as Barnes and Noble and Amazon. In exchange for shared royalties, these booksellers list, promote, and sell both self-published and so-called “virtual reads” to their customer base (Lowell, 2005). This powerful marketing tool means that a writer can self-publish while having the selling advantage of those who have waited a long time to find print-publishing acceptance. This advantage can be attractive, as seen in the over 59 percent increase in self-published and electronic books (Lowell, 2005). As more booksellers agree to sign on for print-on-demand and e-book partnerships, the reading world can expect more authors to take this virtual publishing route.

PROOFREADING VERSUS SPELL CHECK Spell check is a good first pass of your document, but it should not be relied on to catch every error. For example, spell check won’t catch misused words, only misspelled words.

MISUSED WORDS Homophones —words that sound the same but have different spellings Since the words sound alike but have different meanings, homophones won’t usually be caught by spell check.

EXAMPLES OF THESE WORDS ARE: affect vs. effect elicit vs. illicit there, their, they're lead vs. led too, two, to may be vs. maybe then vs. than principal vs. principle loose vs. lose desert vs. dessert

DO YOU KNOW THE DIFFERENCES IN THESE PAIRS? Most stores (except/accept) American Express. The (affect/effect) of the storm was frightening. Carmen is (already/all ready) in class. Marcus is under the (allusion/illusion) that he is famous.

BUT, WHAT ABOUT WHEN YOU’RE PROOFREADING AND NOT SEEING A CHOICE??? Cites like Wikipedia are notoriously unreliable. Charges of liable and plagiarism have been brought forth even though it doesn’t appear Wikipedia knew this was elicit. Their planning to update their policies and procedures, but who knows when these principals will go into effect. Whose planning on policing them and insuring their information is correctly and legally posted? They may lose funding if such standards are impossible to maintain.

BUT, WHAT ABOUT WHEN YOU’RE PROOFREADING AND NOT SEEING A CHOICE??? Cites like Wikipedia are notoriously unreliable. Charges of liable and plagiarism have been brought forth even though it doesn’t appear Wikipedia knew this was elicit. Their planning to update their policies and procedures, but who knows when these principals will go into effect. Whose planning on policing them and insuring their information is correctly and legally posted? They may lose funding if such standards are impossible to maintain. Cites/Sites liable/libel elicit/illicit Their/They are Principals/principles Whose/Who is insuring/ensuring

AS YOU EDIT... Keep in mind that a sentence does not have to be brief to be effective; long sentences can be worthwhile, too. In fact, an essay’s sentence length and structure should vary. Some sentences should be brief and others should be longer. Punctuation and the “sound” of sentences should vary. However, every word should be necessary.

PARAGRAPH WITH TOO MANY SHORT SENTENCES Autism may be caused by injections. Specifically, the injections given to infants are suspect. Booster shots for tetanus, measles, and Diphtheria may contain thermasol. Thermasol is a preservative made with mercury (Tyson, 2004). Preservatives are added to give the drugs a longer shelf life. Some bodies are not able to process mercury. This may put those people at risk for developing autism at “a rate of more than 500%, particularly those with a familial tendency toward autism” (Jackson, 2006, p.7).

PARAGRAPH WITH TOO MANY LONG SENTENCES It seems impossible to not see the link between injections for children and the rise of autism in our country. Because American children receive a host of preventative inoculations such as measles/mumps/rubella, diphtheria/tetanus, chicken pox, and hepatitis, many experts believe the quality and quantity of the injections are problematic in the long term. With millions of dollars of profit at risk, pharmaceutical companies are choosing to include a mercury preservative that gives these injections a longer shelf life. Thermasol, the mercury preservative in question, leaves a residue behind in the system, and in particular the nervous system (Tyson, 2004). Interrupting the way the way the brain and nerves grow puts people at risk for developing autism at “a rate of more than 500%, particularly those with a familial tendency toward autism” (Jackson, 2006, p.7).

PARAGRAPH WITH A BALANCE It seems impossible to not see the link between injections for children and the rise of autism in our country. Specifically, the injections given to infants are suspect. Because American children receive a host of preventative inoculations such as measles/mumps/rubella, diphtheria/tetanus, chicken pox, and hepatitis, many experts believe the quality and quantity of the injections are problematic in the long term. Thermasol is a preservative made with mercury (Tyson, 2004). Preservatives are added to give the drugs a longer shelf life. Some bodies are not able to process mercury and the nervous system suffers. Interrupting the way the way the brain and nerves grow puts people at risk for developing autism at “a rate of more than 500%, particularly those with a familial tendency toward autism” (Jackson, 2006, p.7).

APA MANUSCRIPT FORMAT Include three parts: A title page, the body of the essay and a reference page. Use standard margins: 1 inch on all sides. Use standard 12-point font size. Use standard double-spacing: average of 22 lines per page, and between 20 and 24 lines per page. Use left-aligned text. Do not right-justify. There should be no subtitles or spaces between paragraphs within the paper. Any source should be referenced with an in-text citation in the body of the essay and with a full citation on the reference because the APA citation system is a dual citation system!

T HE B ASICS OF I N - TEXT C ITATIONS : A S UMMARY Use a parenthetical citation: Stephen Glass went to a high school that emphasized high achievement and inventiveness (Bissinger, 1998). Or use in introductory phrase: According to Buzz Bissinger (1998), Stephen Glass went to a high school that emphasized high achievement and inventiveness. Both these examples are examples of paraphrasing. Keep in mind that paraphrases need citations, too!

We integrate quotes into our writing by using a signal phrase or sentence to introduce our quotations. Example: Glass was not the only professional plagiarizing. Janet Cooke, Nik Cohn, and Patricia Smith all worked for major news outlets and were caught or admitted to plagiarism over the last thirty years. According to Bissinger (1998), “none of these journalists approached the sheer calculation of Glass’s deceptions.” Glass had brought plagiarism to a new level. S HORT QUOTATIONS

Use a block quote format for quotes 40 words or longer. Example (71 words): Glass was not the only professional plagiarizing: Janet Cooke had done it in 1980 in a Pulitzer Prize winning piece for The Washington Post. Nik Cohn, 21 years after the fact, blithely admitted to having made up most of the New York story that inspired the film Saturday Night Fever. More recently, Boston Globe columnist Patricia Smith was fired for making up parts of her columns. But none of these journalists approached the sheer calculation of Glass’s deceptions. (Bissinger, 1998) Glass had brought plagiarism to a new level. L ONG QUOTATIONS

R EFERENCE PAGE CITATIONS ( FULL CITATION ): Example: References Bissinger, B. (1998). Shattered Glass. Vanity Fair. Retrieved from ssinger199809?currentPage=all

A NY REMAINING QUESTIONS AND CONCERNS ABOUT APA CITATIONS ? Summarizing? Paraphrasing? Direct quotations? Reference page citations? Anytime material from another source is used in a research project, the source must be given proper credit in the form of in-text and reference page citations!

ANY REMAINING QUESTIONS AND CONCERNS ABOUT REVISING? Revise for content Revise for sentence and paragraph structure Revise for grammar, spelling, punctuation Revise for APA style and citations

LOOKING AHEAD TO UNIT 8 Reading: Chapter 16 “Effective Peer Reviews” and Chapter 18 “Understanding Grading” in The Kaplan Guide to Successful Writing The Scenario section of the Reading assignment and an article on live coaching called “Getting ‘Unstuck:’ Does Your Life Need a Coach?” embedded in the scenario page. A Writing Center Links.pdf called “Introductions and Conclusions” also embedded in the scenario page. Discussion Board: Write an introduction to the concept of life-coaching for a friend and post it on the db. Then pick two postings by fellow students to peer review the introductions they have posted.

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