VOICE What is VOICE in writing? How do you get voice in your writing?

Student Friendly Rubric for VOICE 5 – I’ve put my personal stamp on this paper!  I speak right to my readers.  My paper shines with personality and confidence.  Tone and voice are appropriate for my purpose and audience.  honest, personal, and written from the heart  This will make you think. You’ll want to talk about it with others. 3 – What I truly think and feel shows up sometimes.  Pleasant and friendly – cautious, though.  My personality pokes through here and there.  I play it safe and don’t risk revealing too much of myself.  sincere, but not passionate.  Right on the edge of finding my own voice: strong in places, vague in others. 1 – I’m not comfortable letting the real me show through.  It could be hard to tell who wrote this.  I kept my feelings in check.  Safe and careful – that’s my paper.  Audience? What audience?  No point of view is reflected.

Let’s analyze a picture book! I Wanna Iguana By Karen Kaufman Orloff What do you want??

Wheelchair There is a girl named Sally. She is playing soccer with her friends. There names are Mary, Sue and Shane. Sally tried to kick the soccer ball but she missed the soccer ball. Sally kicked a gigantic rock. Sally had to go to the hospital. Sally got a wheelchair. Two years later Sally got out of the wheelchair. Sally went to go ice skating. Sally went home. Sally got her wheelchair out of the bedroom. Six years later Sally got out of the wheelchair. Sally went to the pet store. She bought a cat. Sally walked home with the cat. When she got home. The cat saw a bird up in a tree. The cat ran up in the tree. Sally climbed the tree. She got the cat. She didn’t fall down. The End

Grandma’s Dog I like my grandma’s dog. She is funny and crazey. I like my dog. She is cool. Her fur is wearm as a fireplace. I love her. I like her. And She like me too. I like my grandma’s dog more than my Dad. And she like’s me more than my grandma. She is fun and weird I love her. And she love’s me too. She is nice and friendly. And she is prite. Sometimes my grandma get’s mad at my dog.

dinosaurs The animals are one of the most interesting things. But the animals that I think are the most interesting are the dinosaurs. They are extinct but I still like them. My four faivorit are the tricaritops, stegasaurs the anklyasaurs and tyranasaursrex. Why do I like these paticualar dinosaurs? Because they have good protection. Take the tricaritops for instens. It has three horns on it’s head. It was one of the only dinosaurs that could beat tyranasaursrex. Speaking of tyranasaursrex he was the most feared dinosaur. He had six inch long teeth. I wander if he brushed his teeth. Oh well. Another well protected dinosaur was the anklyasaurs. This dinosaur had protection of a armed ball, like a hardshell, and sidespikes. Now that’s what I call good pertection. Now the stegasaurs was very calm. Know one knows what the plates and spikes were for. Were they for fighting or to make him look dangerous? You deside. dinosaurs stragly disapeared of the face of the earth. Some say it was a meatyer or a comet. I guess the world will never know.

Tips for YOU as you focus on voice Make your writing sound like you. Show that you really care about your idea. Write with energy and enthusiasm. Write with your reader in mind. Take risks; make your writing memorable.

Now, you get to demonstrate YOUR voice! This shows VOICE!

Today I have the ________ Today I have the greens. The my cat is on my bed greens. The playing with my Lego green. Today I have the ceruleans. The I wish the Sun was not up yet cerulean. The not yet school cerulean. The shells, spaghetti, rigatoni that burns my tongue but tastes yummy cerulean.

Today I have the grays. The sneezing a lot, I don’t care if I’m going to school grays. The I don’t know what to do right now grays. The I have a lot of goodies up my nose and I’m going to get a tissue grays. Today I have the indigos. The I can’t wait until my club indigos. The I can’t wait to play with my sister indigos. The awesome feeling indigos.

Today I have the reds. The angry at the rain reds. The me doing homework reds. Today I have the reds. The find pretzels but open the bag and there’s no salt reds. The want to go outside and play with my friends but it’s raining reds. Today I have the pinks. The pink dog shirt is fitting pinks. The pencil is just fitting pinks. The I love pink pinks.

Voice What FOODS have a lot of voice? Which COLORS have the most voice? Suppose you dressed yourself in CLOTHES with lots of voice; what might your outfit look like? Write a thank you note to somebody you know who has made a difference in your life.

Match voice to purpose Type of letterAudienceVoice

Match VOICE to Purpose Type of letterAudienceVoice Thank you noteRelativeSweet, grateful Note in classFriendFunny, personal InvitationFriendNice, welcoming Fan letterCelebrityAdoring, flattering Letter of excuseTeacherBelievable