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Sample 1 Let’s save energy Can you imagine what our life will be like if we run out of such energy as water, electricity? So it’s not only necessary but also important to save limited （有限的） energy. Actually, we can do some small things in our daily life to save energy. For example, we’d better not turn on air-conditioners if it’s not too hot or too cold. When we leave the room, remember to turn off all the electrical appliances. In this way we can save as much electricity as possible. When we wash our faces or brush our teeth, we’d better use a basin or a mug instead of using a running tap. Also it’s a good idea to reuse water to water the flowers or clean the toilets. All in all, if everyone tries his best to save energy in our daily life, I am sure small changes can make a big difference to our world. ① ② ③ ④

Writing type Tense Person Main points Exposition 说明文 The simple present tense Why do you want to save it? The first person What kind of energy do you want to save? How can you save it?

Sample 2 Let’s save energy Saving energy is very important to us. One day, when I got home, the television set was on but there was nobody at home. Later I knew that my brother forgot to turn it off before he left home. I was a little angry because my brother wasted electricity again. I didn’t go to bed until he came back. And I told him not to waste electricity. Let’s save electricity from now on! 体裁错误

Sample 3 Let’s save energy There are many kinds of energy on the earth. And electricity is one of them. electricity to watch TV. Secondly, it is used for cooking delicious food. Last but not least, we need electricity to run machines. we can’t live well without it. In a word, as one kind of energy, electricity is so important that we must save it. I want to save electricity because So we mustn’t touch the switches with wet hands. For example, firstly, we use Electricity is a good servant but a dangerous one. So we mustn’t touch the switches with wet hands. Electricity is a good servant but a dangerous one. ，部分内容与主题无关 内容不完整 How can we save energy?

Sample 4 Let’s save energy Energy are very lots, such as water, electricity and trees. We use water to clean ourselves. We use electricity for making phone calls. We use wood to make paper. However, people are wasting them every day. Because we must take action to save them. We can save water by fixing a dripping tap. We save electricity by turning off all the lights. We can save trees by not cutting down trees. Saving energy is saving ourselves. Let’s save energy to make our earth a greener place. 内容不够新颖

More creative ways to save energy

We can use cloth bags instead of plastic bags to save energy. It’s a good idea to drink water with glasses to reduce paper cups. Walking to school is a good way to save energy.

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Sample 4 Let’s save energy Energy are very lots, such as water, electricity and trees. We use water to clean ourselves. electricity can be used to cook food and people use wood to make paper. However, people are wasting them every day. Because we must take action to save them. We can save water by reusing water. We can save electricity by turning off all the lights when we leave rooms. We can save wood by recycling water paper. Saving energy is saving ourselves. Let’s save energy to make our earth a greener place. 内容新颖 There is a lot of energy, 1. 表达不地道 2. 逻辑不清晰 3. 句式不丰富 So

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Revise Sample 5 according to the checklist. Let’s save energy There have many kinds of energy in our life, such as water and electricity. If we without them, we will not live comfortable. We use water to drink. We use water to wash our faces. We use electricity to watch TV. We use electricity to play computer games. However, many of us do something bad to water and electricity. Some factories release polluted water into rivers. A lot of people forget to close windows when the air-conditioner is on. In a word, it’s necessary to save energy. We must save energy from now on!

Homework Revise your own composition according to the checklist.