Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining Why is the second example more effective than the first? American colonists played the British game of rounders. They played it in New England. They played it in the 1700s. In the 1700s, American colonists in New England played the British game of rounders. Next i

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining i CLOSE The second example presents the ideas more clearly and concisely. Why is the second example more effective than the first? American colonists played the British game of rounders. They played it in New England. They played it in the 1700s. In the 1700s, American colonists in New England played the British game of rounders.

Wordiness MENUEXIT When you combine short, related sentences and sentence parts into single sentences, your writing will flow more smoothly clearly show relationships among ideas be more interesting to read Sentence Combining Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness Use the following sentence combining strategies as you revise. Click on the strategy you want to explore. MENUEXIT MENU Sentence Combining Combine whole sentences Combine sentence parts Insert words or phrases Use an appositive phrase Combine with who, which, and thatCombine with who, which, and that

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining How could you combine these sentences using a coordinating conjunction? The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. l They PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly. PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining PREVIOUS The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly., but they

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Use a coordinating conjunction—and, or, but, for, so, yet, nor—to combine two sentences that are of equal importance and are closely related in some way. Sentence Combining Notice how combining the sentences makes the relationship between the ideas clearer. Next PREVIOUS The wild ponies of Chincoteague gallop fast. They tire fairly quickly., but they

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Which of these sentences could be combined using coordinating conjunctions? My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way. He had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd. He cheered me on so everyone could hear. ORIGINAL REVISED My uncle was a small man who always stayed out of the way, but he had a booming voice. On the day of my race, though, he stood at the front of the crowd, and he cheered me on so everyone could hear. Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Combine Whole Sentences Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Use subordinating conjunctions like these to combine two sentences whose ideas are not equally important. The less important sentence then becomes a subordinate clause. when after before until while since because as if so that providedwhether if unless though although Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How might these two sentences be combined using a subordinating conjunction? Mia refused to give up her place in line. She knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining This revision combines the two sentences, making the less important idea the subordinate clause. Mia refused to give up her place in line. She knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. ORIGINAL REVISED Mia refused to give up her place in line because she knew she might never get another chance to hear the band. Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining How would you combine these sentences using subordinating conjunctions? I practiced soccer everyday. I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well. It surprised even me. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Whole Sentences Sentence Combining Notice how much more smoothly the revised sentences flow. Also notice that the relationships between ideas are now clearer. I practiced soccer everyday. I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well. It surprised even me. ORIGINAL REVISED I practiced soccer everyday because I wanted to make the team. The next tryout went so well that it surprised even me. Menu PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS How can these sentences be combined by creating a compound subject? My dog always barks at the mail carrier. Our neighbor’s dog always barks at her too. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Two sentences may share the same subject or predicate. Combine the sentences by creating a compound subject or a compound predicate. PREVIOUS Because the both dogs are performing the same action, these sentences can easily be combined. My dog always barks at the mail carrier. Our neighbor’s dog always barks at her too. ORIGINAL REVISED My dog and our neighbor’s dog always bark at the mail carrier. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Akiko rode her bike to the park. Ethan rode his bike to the park too. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house. They got caught in the rain on the way. Click to see the answer PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Which subjects and predicates in these sentences could be combined? Akiko rode her bike to the park. Ethan rode his bike to the park too. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house. They got caught in the rain on the way. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine Sentence Parts Sentence Combining Combining similar subjects and predicates with coordinating conjunctions gives the paragraph a better flow and makes it more interesting to read. Akiko and Ethan rode their bikes to the park. They decided to ride together to Lori’s house but got caught in the rain on the way. Menu PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS How could these two sentences be combined? I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates. book. It was a

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. It was a spell-binding book about pirates.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a book. spell-binding book about pirates.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a bo spell-binding book about pirates.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Combine sentences by inserting a word from one sentence into another sentence. PREVIOUS Insert the description of the book into the first sentence. I spent the rainy day reading a spell-binding book about pirates. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining In this example, what words could be inserted from one sentence into the other? The most popular national park in the United States is in Tennessee and North Carolina. It is Great Smoky Mountains National Park. Click to see a revision PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining The new sentence is now concise and direct. The most popular national park in the United States is in Tennessee and North Carolina. It is Great Smoky Mountains National Park. ORIGINAL REVISED The most popular national park in the United States is Great Smoky Mountains National Park in Tennessee and North Carolina. Next PREVIOUS

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Continue…

Wordiness Click to see the word that must change form MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. PREVIOUS Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Click to see a revision Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Which word must change form when these sentences are combined? Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone. She smiled. solution was clever. TheShe smiled.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Katya sang into the microphone. Smiling,

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Sometimes the form of a word must be changed before it is added to another sentence. You may need to add an ending such as –n, -y, -ing, or –ly. Next Katya sang into the microphone. Smiling,

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What word in these sentences could change form in order to combine the two sentences? The hungry dog ran toward the heaping bowl of food. He was eager. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Adding -ly to eager turns it into an adverb which can be used to describe how the dog ran. The hungry dog ran toward the heaping bowl of food. He was eager. ORIGINAL REVISED The hungry dog ran eagerly toward the heaping bowl of food. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. Click to see the phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. Which phrase in the second sentence could be moved to the first sentence to make a single statement? My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A phrase from one sentence can be added to another sentence to make one concise sentence. My neighbor was knocking at my door. He was knocking loudly and angrily. ORIGINAL REVISED My neighbor was knocking loudly and angrily at my door. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. Click to see the phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS What phrase can be added to the first sentence so that the second sentence is no longer needed? The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS The snow fell thickly over the whole valley. It fell for several hours. hours. It fell for several

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS The snow fell thickly over the whole valley

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS The snow fell thickly over the whole valley for several hours.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Insert Words or Phrases Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Menu The snow fell thickly over the whole valley for several hours.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that identifies or explains a noun or pronoun. PREVIOUS What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Olivia E. Coolidge, an English author, wrote about Greek myths. Click to see the appositive phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Use an Appositive Phrase What is the appositive phrase in this sentence? Olivia E. Coolidge, an English author, wrote about Greek myths. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Use an Appositive Phrase Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Click to see the sentence When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Click to see a revision When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Which sentence could be turned into an appositive phrase and added to the other sentence? The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Use an Appositive Phrase The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. are. The Rocky Mountains

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains are the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky Mountains form the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. Use an Appositive Phrase The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America. The Rocky form the Continental Divide.

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America. The Rform the Continental Divide. Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Sentence Combining PREVIOUS When two sentences include information about the same noun or pronoun, change one sentence into an appositive. The Rocky Mountains, the largest mountain system in North America, form the Continental Divide. Menu Use an Appositive Phrase

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Continue…

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see the answer

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentence could be turned into a clause? Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS A person, place, or thing may be discussed in one sentence with details about it provided in another sentence. Combine the sentences by turning one sentence into a clause beginning with who, which, or that. Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator. The machine helps patients breathe. ORIGINAL REVISED Hospitals often use a machine called a respirator that helps patients breathe. Next

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Rachel Carson was a gifted writer. She worked for the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service. In 1962, she wrote a book called Silent Spring. It helped create the environmental movement. This movement remains powerful today. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Which sentences could be combined by using who, which, and that? Rachel Carson was a gifted writer. She worked for the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service. In 1962, she wrote a book called Silent Spring. It helped create the environmental movement. This movement remains powerful today. Click to see a revision

Wordiness MENUEXIT Combine with Who, Which and That Sentence Combining PREVIOUS Turning these phrases into clauses makes this paragraph less repetitive and more concise. Rachel Carson, who worked for the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service, was a gifted writer. In 1961, she wrote a book called Silent Spring, which helped create the environmental movement that remains powerful today. Menu