2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph1 Class work Review Comment on the last homework Practice: Building a paragraph 1 2 3

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph2 Chapter II: The Paragraph Learn to Write Lecture One: The basics

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph3 Lecture One: The basics Topic idea, topic sentence & developing sentences Expanding the core Paragraph & essay 1 2 3

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph4 Chapter II: The Paragraph Learn to Write Lecture Two: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph5 1. Narration 2. Description 3. Argument 4. Exemplification 5. Listing 6. Process 7. Classification 8. Cause & effect 9. Comparison & contrast 1. Narration 2. Description 3. Argumentation ParagraphComposition 4. Exposition Ways to build a paragraph Forms of composition

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph6 Review 1: The basics Developing sentences / Expanding the core Sample 1: Smoking is harmful to the smokers themselves. It has been reported that smokers take higher risks in suffering from lung diseases, including lung cancer. Liver troubles in some patients are also considered to be related to smoking as smokers take in more poisonous substances. Harm 1 Harm 2

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph7 Review 1: The basics Having paid for their education, students have entered a contract relationship with their university. This relationship has entitled them to the decision-making power about their study such as who are suitable to teach them. Developing sentences / Expanding the core Sample 2: Students have the right to select their teachers. Developing sentences / Expanding the core Sample 2: Students have the right to select their teachers.

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph8 Argument Sample: Second, it may improve the quality of teaching. Review 2: Building a paragraph Taught by teachers they like and thus choose, students may be better motivated and thus learn more and better. Besides, prompted by the selection, teachers may try to improve their teaching to attract more students. ① ②

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph9 Comment on the last homework I. Strengths Conscientious work but late submission Some improvements in sentence writing Some well-written paragraphs Praise list: 傅明政，张良伟，刘宇，薛晓慧，卢勇, 冯奖，任辰舟，牟瑞卿

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph10 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but I never eat chocolate because I'm allergic to it, and I don't like nuts either, so I never eat them, but I'm not allergic to them, so last week I went out and I bought some nuts.

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph11 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but Students may not know teachers well. So they may make wrong choices. (Revised: Students may make wrong choices about teachers as they do not know the teachers.)

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph12 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph13 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph14 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph15 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph16 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph17 Comment on the last homework II. Problems 1. Limited vocabulary Few used choose, select, choice, etc. Misuse of adapt, adjust, suitable, etc 2. Sentence errors Stringy sentences: separated by a comma and a conjunction: and, so, but More examples

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph18 3. Illogical sentences Lack of Coherence, Unity, Completeness 看似列举清楚，实则漏洞百出，逻辑荒唐 因果关系不明确，条件句不成立： “ 因为 A, 所以 C ” 序数词后：既有理，也有据。 Comment on the last homework - A teacher would become more devoted if election were held regularly and efficiently. - They don’t want to listen to the teachers who they don’t like even though they are good at teaching?

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph19 3. Illogical sentences Lack of Coherence, Unity, Completeness 看似列举清楚，实则漏洞百出，逻辑荒唐 因果关系不明确，条件句不成立： “ 因为 A, 所以 C ” 序数词后：既有理，也有据。 Comment on the last homework - If teachers are elected by students, they will work harder and be more responsible. - According to the students’ characters, teachers can give more help to students who desperately need it.

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph20 3. Illogical sentences Lack of Coherence, Unity, Completeness 看似列举清楚，实则漏洞百出，逻辑荒唐 因果关系不明确，条件句不成立： “ 因为 A, 所以 C ” 序数词后：既有理，也有据。 Comment on the last homework - Firstly, China’s educational system doesn’t allow them to elect teachers. - Interesting and popular teachers will certainly improve the teaching quality (They are not necessarily good teachers).

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph21 One possibility First, students have the right to select their teachers. Having paid for their education, they have the power to make decision about their study. Second, it may improve the quality of teaching. Taught by teachers they like and thus choose, students may be better motivated and learn more effectively. Finally, it may improve communication between teachers and students. Students will talk more with teachers they like than with those they dislike. Comment on the last homework

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph22 Comment on the last homework Another possibility First, it is difficult to make the right choice about teachers. Due to lack of information, the teachers we thought good and selected may turn out unsuitable to us later. Second, popular teachers are not necessarily good teachers. They may be lenient and irresponsible and excuse students too much. Finally, as students, we should adapt ourselves to the society, including teachers, rather than vice versa. It is part of education we should have.

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph23 Advertisements can be of service to people. ( Exemplification) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph24 There are many kinds of books. (Classification) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph25 It is necessary to pass Cet-4. (cause and effect) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph26 I saw a dreadful sight when I entered the room. (description) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph27 Whatever one does, one should do it with confidence. (argument) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph28 Life in the city is quite different from life in the country. (contrast) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph29 I can never forget the day when I met him for the first time. (narration) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph30 If I had plenty of leisure time and money, I would realize my dreams. (listing) Practice: Building a paragraph

2006.9Class work-Building a paragraph31 To find the errors from your composition, you should follow these steps. (process) Practice: Building a paragraph

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