The Assessing and Improving of Picture Writing 高三复习作文讲评课

一家服装店的橱窗外，两只狐狸在对话： ---- 爸爸快看，妈妈在对我笑呐！ ---- 走吧儿子，有人过来了。 请简要描述这幅图片，并就其传达的信息和 意义谈谈你的看法。 Guided Writing How to describe a picture?

Student's work Part One ： Describe the picture There are two foxes standing outside the window of a clothes shop. The little one lets his father see his mother and says, “Daddy, my mother is smiling to me”. But his father takes him away because someone is coming. How to polish it?

There are two foxes standing outside of the window of a clothes shop.The little one lets his father see his mother and says, “Daddy, my mother is smiling to me”But his father takes him away because someone is coming. while the old fox is rather worried with tears in his eyes, telling his child to go, as someone may come to catch them for fur. What a tragedy! 加开头 形容词、副词 with 结构 two foxes are standing in front of a shop window ， staring at a fashionable coat. 非谓语 The young fox is especially glad when seeing the fur collar and innocently says, “Daddy, my mother is smiling to me” ， 加入想象 As is vividly shown in the picture, 感叹句

Practice ：描述上课的情景

描述上课的情景 Wearing excitement and eager expressions, the children in the picture raise their hands as high as they can for the opportunity to answer the question put forward by the teacher. It apparently seems that all of them, whether boys or girls, sociable or shy, are totally fascinated and inspired, and are always full of creative ideas.

Why do people kill animals ? Brainstorm Part Two ： Interpret the implied meaning What does the picture reflect? What is the consequence of the phenomenon? What should we do to stop this tragedy?

I feel sad and angry after seeing this picture. The baby fox has lost his mother and the father fox has lost his wife. Human being's desire and cruelty have destroyed many animal 's peaceful life and family. Without the animals, our world will be boring and lack joy. Student's work Part Two ： Interpret the implied meaning

Writing Checklists 1.Does my paragraph have a topic sentence? 2. Have I provided detailed facts to support my opinion? 3. Have I used transitional words to help readers follow my thought? 4.Are there any advanced vocabulary and varied sentences? 5. Does my paragraph have any grammatical and spelling errors? 6. Does my paragraph have a concluding sentence?

Seeing that,I can't help feeling angry and sad. The baby fox and his father have lost their beloved family member, feeling the sorrow between life and death. Cruel human beings have destroyed many creatures's happiness just for their own profits. Great profits make people turn a blind eye to their clear conscience. Animals become the innocent victim of human's irresponsible hunting and killing. How to polish it?

Seeing that,I can't help feeling angry and sad. The picture reflects ____________________________. ___________,the baby fox and his father have lost their beloved family member, feeling the sorrow between life and death._________, cruel human beings have destroyed many creatures's happiness just for their own profits. _____________,great profits make people turn a blind eye to their clear conscience. __________animals become the innocent victim of human's irresponsible hunting and killing. ____________, the harmony between human and animals will be broken. Let's practise! the human being's cruelty to animals For one thing For another As a consequence Eventually In short topic sentence concluding sentence

As far as I am concerned, the awareness of the significance of protecting animals should be enhanced and some proper measures should be taken. Only in this way, can animals and human beings live in harmony. Part Three ： Give opinions

Assignment Write an English composition in words according to the picture and the instructions given below. 1) 简要描述图片； 2 ）就图片呈现的现象 谈谈你的看法。