GOOD MORNING! “Easy reading is damned hard writing.” ~ Nathaniel Hawthorne 16 Dec Learning Target: Give precise and meaningful writing feedback Please take out your essay, grab your (whole!) portfolio folder, and copy down today’s learning target

Agenda12/16/13  Plan for the week  Portfolio organization  Bellwork  Focused editing time  Homework: Complete all your Portfolio Piece #2 assignments for Friday! Google doc file sharing typed reflection questions (paper copy) final portfolio piece with previous drafts (paper copies)

Plan for the week  Today: Focused peer editing!  Tuesday: In Lab 100 for work time  Wednesday: In Lab 200 for work time***  Thursday: In Lab 200 for work time  (I’m here for conference period if you need extra help, or if you have a tardy detention!)  Friday: Portfolio Party! Bring all required materials, plus a mug for our hot cocoa treat!  AND THEN WINTER BREAK!!!!

Quick Notes  Applying for that Marshall Leadership Scholarship?  Oops! I need to nominate you first! Pick up a half sheet and fill out that info so I can sell you to the committee!  Triple check that the portfolio piece you’re working on for #2 is the OPPOSITE type of essay than what you did for #1!!! Very important if you want credit for #2!!

Portfolio Organization Time  Grab your yellow growth chart  REALLY fill out and update this today (let’s get caught up!)  Grab your tan “strategies” list  Useful to use on your partner’s paper today  Pick up an updated yellow DPA rubric  You’ll staple this copy to the front of your PP#2-please hold onto it!  This is how I evaluate your PP#2-make sure you feel clear about the criteria listed  You’ll need to use this language when you self-assess on the reflection questions

Bellwork**12/16/13  **On your actual paper, write this down and highlight one or two spots that illustrate this concern.  What do you think is your biggest issue with this piece of writing?

Focused editing time  Write ALL OVER your partner’s paper!  Help spot misspelled words, incorrect grammar, etc., but really focus on 1-2 of the ideas below:  levels of diction  specific vs. general words  verb tense consistency  strong verbs!  change passive voice to active voice  eliminate repetitive redundancy ( )  Minimize prepositional phrases  delete weak phrases  remove unnecessary who, which, and that clauses  eliminate “roundabout openings”

Wrap Up**12/16/13  What areas did you focus on to help your partner improve their essay?  What areas did your partner focus on to help you improve your essay?  Do you feel like you know how to improve your paper, or do you need more help? What kind of help would be useful?  **Write this on your notecard along with your name, and then turn it in up front.  Remember, we’re in the labs for Tuesday-Thursday!