Full Draft Final Peer Review Switch papers! WRITE YOUR NAME ON THE BOTTOM OF PAGE 1 OF YOUR PARTNER’S PAPER. IF you do not want someone else marking on what could potentially be your final draft, you may keep your own paper. Yes, you still have to write on it.

TITLE Yes, your paper needs a title The title should not be “Hamlet.” It’s already been written. The title should not be “Hamlet analysis” Your title should be creative. It should be centered. It should not be underlined or contained in quotation marks.

Review: What a thesis looks like YES NO Although children are still legally bound to obedience to their parents in today’s society, they are afforded more dignity and respect than in Shakespeare’s time. The relationship between parents and children is different today but in some ways is the same. Got it? Ok, now let’s look at YOUR claims.

Labeling Highlight your STATEMENTS

Claim Check: Claim should be highlighted in blue. YES (Must Have BOTH) If it looks like this, they do NOT have a claim: Includes a claim with a modern aspect of society / aspect of Renaissance society EX: Women have gained more legal rights throughout the years, yet in many ways, ours is still a male-dominated society. “Kids to day are different.” “Women have more power today.” “Women had no rights in Renaissance times.” “Entertainment was not as advanced then.”

Get Rid of Summary Cross out all instances of summary in each section Summary should only be EXTREMELY BRIEF to provide context to quotes. Example: In act one, scene two, just after Hamlet greets Horatio, Hamlet makes the sarcastic comment, “Thrift, thrift, Horatio. The funeral baked meats did coldly furnish forth the marriage tables.” (172-173). “just after Hamlet greets Horatio” gives context but does not waste space with summary

Moving to Introduction Let’s start with the thesis to make sure that all of the claims you just checked are consistent with the thesis. If they don’t go together, then the author MUST go back and adjust the thesis so that it encompasses the essence of the claims. What do I mean by that? The next slide will walk you through it.

Thesis Statement Highlight green words in green Check that they are green and NOUNS Check thesis against personality traits identified in claims. Does it match or does it contradict what the writer says in the body of the paper about Hamlet? Make sure it isn’t three-prong Shouldn’t just list green words or personality traits

Check the Introduction’s Grabber Does your partner have one? Is it effective? Did your partner use a random quote that seems out of place? Let him/her know. If your partner starts off with a question, does it work or does it seem out of place or unrelated? Let him/her know. Give an example of a grabber your partner could use.

Name of play and playwright; basic info Does the intro contain the title of the play? Is the title properly capitalized? Is the title italicized or underlined? If it has quotation marks around it, it’s wrong. Is William Shakespeare spelled correctly? Does the intro offer general info regarding the play?

Check for word vomit Did your partner use grandiose language about Shakespeare being “the greatest dramatist ever” or perhaps the “most amazing writer who ever lived”? Did you partner refer to Hamlet as the “golden play” or other such nonsense? If so, cross it out.

Mechanics Check Check for: Comma usage Hamlet’s vs. Hamlets, Ophelia’s vs. Ophelias, etc. Hamlet, the play vs. Hamlet, the man (vs. hamlet, the small village) Capitalization of proper nouns Elsinore, Hamlet, Gertrude, Claudius, Ophelia, Polonius, Laertes, Fortinbras, Denmark, Norway, Poland Again, take time with this. Do not simply say, “It’s fine.”

Mechanics Check Spelling Word choice that isn’t quite right. remember it’s erratic behavior, not erotic behavior He self-deprecates; he does not self-defecate If you spell a character’s name wrong, then you are just being lazy. It’s all over the text; just copy it for heaven’s sake. Word choice that isn’t quite right. Run-on sentences and sentence fragments Anything else you see. Even if you aren’t sure, mark it. You know when something doesn’t look or sound quite right. Your partner will know to double-check.

Language Register Check Are they staying in formal register? Look back at notes to check. Includes using “I,” “you,” “me,” “my,” Use a pen or a pencil to circle any register drops and write “register” next to these circled areas.

Citations Plays are cited differently than other text you encounter Act 3, scene 2, lines 21-23 (3.2.21-23) OR (III.ii.21-23) Pick one and stick with it In his famous advice to the players, Hamlet defines the purpose of theater, "whose end, both at the first and now, was and is, to hold, as 'twere, the mirror up to nature" (3.2.21-23). Separated by a period Change citations now (if needed)

Works cited page Includes an MLA format works cited page Two research sources listed (minimum) Hamlet listed