Today’s goals Review strategies for editing Discuss comma usage and sentence structure Continue to analyze and improve the descriptive writing in our essays

Editing and Revision Two types of revision: Local revision: whenever you make changes to a text that affect only one or two sentences. Grammar and spelling revision usually falls into this category Local revisions should be focused on towards the end of the writing process, after global revisions or changes that affect the content of the essay Global revision: when a change in one part of your essay affects other parts of your essay Any changes to your thesis statement or thesis question will likely fall here Also includes changes to the main ideas of the essay, the structure, purpose, audience, and genre Changes to topic sentences and transitions also fall here You should be globally revising your essay throughout the writing process and certainly with every new draft. Global revisions are the most important revisions

Editing and local revision Editing, particularly with local revisions, requires two separate skills: Perception The ability to identify incorrect forms or parts of the essay that need revision Knowledge In order to make appropriate corrections, you must know the correct form (spelling/grammatical/MLA format/etc.) to use or the intended goal of a piece and how best to accomplish it at the sentence level We will work to cultivate both of these skills in our monthly editing and grammar classes

Class discussion- sentence structures What are the necessary elements in an English sentence? What is the difference between a compound sentence and a complex sentence? Where/why do we add commas in a sentence?

Common Comma Usage Separate clauses (may require a conjunction) List items in a series Offset quotations Offset Introductory element Show non-restrictive elements

Common Sentence Structures Compound sentences: have more than one independent clause Independent clause, (coordinating conjunction) independent clause Independent clause; independent clause Complex sentences: have an independent clause and one or more subordinate clauses Independent clause (subordinate conjunction) dependent clause (Subordinate conjunction) Dependent clause, independent clause Note: it is possible to have sentences that are compound as well as complex

conjunctions Coordinate conjunctions Subordinate conjunctions Remember: FAN BOYS For And Nor But Or Yet So Because Although After Before While Though Unless Until (and many others)

Examples Where would we add commas here to separate dependent and independent clauses? Are these sentences compound, complex, or both? I have never been to Australia but I have always wanted to go Because I was always so stubborn I couldn’t admit defeat We won’t have more paper until I go to the store The scientist wasn’t sure about his theory and it showed in his presentation Although I have always wanted to play basketball I am probably too short

Items in a series A and B A, B, and/or C A, B (for adjectives) Examples: I bought a soda hamburger and fries from McDonalds I went to the store mailed my bills and walked the dog I have never seen such a colorful elegant dress before Jason brought cups and napkins to the party

Nonrestrictive Elements Where would it be necessary to add commas to show nonrestrictive elements here? Her stepfather whom she disliked intensely was a deadbeat The three police officers who had just finished eating donuts arrived at the scene of the crime

Group activity- unit 1 grammar In your unit 1 groups, edit the following material Based on using commas to separate clauses, add commas to the following sentences if necessary and identify the sentences as compound, complex, or both. Although I like sunbathing at the beach to get a tan I hate to get sunburn. I hate going to math class althogh the professor is nice Because I studied all night I was too tired to focus and I flunked the exam. We could go to the movies and have diner or we could just stay home. Based on using commas to offset non-restrictive elements, add commas to the following sentences, if necessary, and explain why you chose to add them in that location. Fishermen who do not obey catch and release laws are often fined. The star athelete who had won many games was given a gold medal. Based on using commas to list items in a series, add commas to the following sentences, if necessary, and explain why you chose to add them in that location. I went to the gym lifted waits drank a shake and went home. While your at the grocery store, please pick up eggs milk and bread. She gave her husband a quick unexpected slap.

Group activity- Descriptive Examples Read through your WTR draft and find your best example of a character description and setting description Share your descriptions with your group members and answer the following questions What is the best example of a character description amongst your group? Write it here. What makes this character description so good? What is the best example of a setting description amongst your group? Write it here. What makes this setting description so good?

homework WTR Draft 3 – Submitted to Turnitin.com by midnight tonight Class ID: 14685389 Password: 4English WTR – Final Draft 1,000+ words Should include your rising action, climax, and falling action Should describe at least two characters and settings Should include all stages of reflection Submitted to Turnitin.com before Sunday 2/12 at midnight Paper copies will not be accepted for the final draft