Language Network Elaboration

Elaboration Elaboration Elaboration provides details that help the reader fully understand the topic.

Elaboration Types of Elaboration Sensory Details Facts and Statistics

Sensory Details Sensory details are bits of information that you collect through your five senses. sight sound touch taste smell

Sensory Details When you elaborate with sensory details, you give the reader a much clearer idea of what you are describing.

Sensory Details You can use a word web to help you add sensory details to your writing. Smells like sweet, clean air Feels like an ice-cream sundae Tastes like cold cotton candy Sounds like loud crunching Looks like the stuffing in pillows My First Snowfall

Sensory Details STUDENT MODEL SENSORY DETAILS I saw snow for the first time when I was ten... When I looked out the window early one morning, it seemed like someone was shaking the stuffing out of pillows and letting it drift downward. I put on my new boots and ran outside. I was surprised by the noise of my boots crunching on the hard surface of the packed snow…The air smelled clean and sweet. I grabbed a handful of snow. It felt like I was putting my hand into an ice-cream sundae!... SIGHT SOUND SMELL TOUCH

Sensory Details To gather details about a person or object, make careful observations. Keep a small notebook or journal with you and jot them down. If you are writing about something that has happened, close your eyes and try to visualize the event.

Facts are statements that can be proved. Facts and Statistics Facts are statements that can be proved.

Statistics are facts expressed with one or more numbers. Facts and Statistics Statistics are facts expressed with one or more numbers. Statistics can be used to make comparisons between things or between a part of something and the whole.

Facts and Statistics When you elaborate with facts and statistics, you help your readers understand your ideas.

--Robert D. Ballard, Exploring the Titanic Facts and Statistics LITERARY MODEL FACTS AND STATISTICS The final size and richness of this new ship was astounding. She was 882 feet long, almost the length of four city blocks. With nine decks, she was as high as an eleven-story building… As her name boasted, the Titanic was indeed the biggest ship in the world. --Robert D. Ballard, Exploring the Titanic

Give your reader comparisons, not just numbers. Facts and Statistics Give your reader comparisons, not just numbers.

Elaborating with Visuals Elaboration Elaborating with Visuals Diagrams Other Visuals Practice and Apply

Using visuals to elaborate is a great way to show rather than tell. Elaboration Using visuals to elaborate is a great way to show rather than tell. Your reader can see at a glance what information you are giving and how it all fits together.

Diagrams Diagrams Diagrams are drawings that give information about an object or a process.

Types of diagrams include time lines flow charts labeled drawings 1990 1995 2000 2005 2010

You can elaborate with a diagram. Diagrams You can elaborate with a diagram. A volcano is an opening in the crust of the earth where lava, ashes, and gases are released. Inside a Volcano Ash cloud full of bits of rock and magma (hot, liquid rock) Cone layers of hardened, cooled lava and other materials ejected from the volcano Magma chamber volcanic eruption happens when magma travels upward and breaks through the earth’s crust Central vent and side vent magma flows from the chamber through here

Charts and graphs present facts and statistics in a visual format. Other Visuals Charts and graphs present facts and statistics in a visual format. They let your reader see and compare information easily.

Other Visuals STUDENT MODEL CHARTS AND GRAPHS Volcanoes have caused some of the worst natural disasters in history. Lava flows have destroyed whole towns, and people have starved to death because their farmland got covered with ashes and nothing could grow. Over the past 200 years, more than 250,000 people have died because of volcano eruptions. Four huge eruptions caused about 70 percent of those deaths. (SEE NEXT SLIDE)

Deadliest Volcano Eruptions, Late 1700s-Present Other Visuals How does this graph elaborate on volcanoes? STUDENT MODEL CHARTS AND GRAPHS Deadliest Volcano Eruptions, Late 1700s-Present

Add sensory details to the following sentence. Practice and Apply Add sensory details to the following sentence. Barbara photographed a cactus in the desert. 1.

Add sensory details to the following sentence. Practice and Apply Add sensory details to the following sentence. The big bear looked menacing. 2.

Add sensory details to the following sentence. Practice and Apply Add sensory details to the following sentence. I remember my first trip to a movie theater. 3.

Provide facts or statistics to support the following statement. Practice and Apply Provide facts or statistics to support the following statement. To see statistics you can use, click here. Cultures around the world are rapidly becoming part of a global, fast-paced community. 4.

• More than one-fifth of the world population speaks English. Practice and Apply • In one California school 32 different languages are spoken by the student body. • More than one-fifth of the world population speaks English. • Television took 13 years to acquire 50 million users; within five years, the Internet had 50 million users. • Russia, China, and India now have some of the same fast- food restaurant chains that the U.S. has. return to Practice and Apply