Aim: How can we continue to reinforce an effective approach to The Common Core English Regents? Do-Now: Look over the comments and corrections that I made to your Part 2 practice paragraphs

Part 2 Tips and Reminders Paragraph 1: Introduction Introduce all three topic sentences Create a fluid transition from Step #4 to Step #5 Ex: (Step #4) There are some who would argue that paying college athletes would diminish the charm that comes from the fans’ perception that these athletes are playing exclusively for school pride. (Step #5) Despite the possibility that this characteristic of purity could be lost, paying the student-athletes remains the ethically correct decision.

Part 2 Tips and Reminders Paragraphs 2-3: Body Paragraphs Should you ask the reader rhetorical questions within the body paragraphs? – NO Ex: Haven’t the athletes earned the right to be paid? Instead: The only conclusion that one can reach based on this evidence is that the athletes have earned the right to be paid.

Part 3: General Tips and Reminders 2-3 paragraphs total!!!!

Part 3: General Tips and Reminders You really only need to use the words “central idea” the first time that you identify the central idea It is more sophisticated not to use the words “literary element” or “literary device” when identifying the name of the literary element Ex: Twain develops the central idea through the use of the literary device simile Better: Twain develops the central idea through the use of simile

Part 3: General Tips and Reminders Central Idea Too basic: One central idea illustrated in the text is that Kyle is in pain Too unfocused: One central idea illustrated in the text is that Kyle is in pain, but he is fighting to overcome that pain and at the same time is unsure if he will ever achieve his goals without the help of his sister who is angry with him Effective: One central idea illustrated in the text is that Kyle is able to overcome intense pain through the emotional support and guidance from his sister

Proofreading and Grammar Always, Always PROOFREAD That’s right, every sentence that you write should be re-read to avoid errors and insure clarity When you have two words that could possibly work, choose one and go with it Incorrect: The athletes will lose respect/credibility if they are paid. Correct: The athletes will lose credibility if they are paid. Avoid contractions in formal papers Correct: Doesn’t, Wasn’t, Couldn’t Better: Does not, Was not, Could not

Diction and Grammar Use synonyms whenever possible, especially in back to back sentences You know my rationale for this - The more repetitive that you appear, the less of a grasp it seems that you have on the material Do not capitalize words that are either not proper nouns or do not begin a sentence When you refer to a specific text for Part 2, capitalize the name of the text Incorrect: In text 2, the author writes Correct: In Text 2, the author writes

Diction In the general spirit of synonym usage, vary your word choice when making connections Some of the words to be used when making connections between evidence and argument (or central idea) The author illustrates the central idea The writer develops the central idea The quote helps to establish the argument The speaker supports the argument

Diction The writer (or author) writes something, she does not say something Correct: The author illustrates the central idea when she writes, “The typewriter was blue… Incorrect: The author illustrates the central idea when she says, “The typewriter was blue...

Diction Incorrect: Evidence is found on lines 23-25 Correct: Evidence is found in lines 23-25 The first time that you mention an author, use the first and last name Then refer to him or her by their last name for the rest of the response You may refer to characters by their first name Use a comma before starting a quote Ex: The author illustrates the central idea when she writes, “The typewriter was blue…

Synonyms, Synonyms, Synonyms Try not to repeat the words that are in the quote when you are demonstrating how it supports your argument …“voters who are voting against their free will may check off a candidate at random” (Text 2, line 28). Arbitrary voting by the majority would obviously be less helpful than a sincere, informed selection from a smaller percentage of citizens.

Sentence Structure You can never start a sentence with the following words However For instance Therefore For example Each of the preceding words can continue a sentence. Place a semicolon before the word and a comma afterwards Ex: After the athletes start to get paid, they will begin to lose their passion for the game; however, they will be rescued from the jaws of poverty

More Examples of Continuing Sentences After the athletes start to get paid, they will begin to lose their passion for the game; therefore, their performance will be less inspired and of lower quality The athletes are under a lot of pressure when they are forced to both fulfill their obligations to their team while also working odd jobs to make ends meet; for example, working in the cafeteria or shelving books at the library.

Punctuation, Grammar, and Organization Do not place quotation marks at the end of a line, “ Maintain the present tense unless referring to a flashback Do not indent too far to the right when starting a new paragraph

Continue Working on Practice Part 2 – “Should Student-Athletes Be Paid