Paper 1 Question 5 : - used to list things. Descriptive techniques The basics Metaphor Simile Alliteration Onomatopoeia Personification Hyperbole 5 senses Paper 1 Question 5 Sophisticated punctuation ? – rhetorical questions. ! – emotional or commands (don’t over use) : - used to list things. ; - Like a comma, used to pause. (replaces the word because) … - To show a dramatic pause or an incomplete idea. Remember the rules Grab their attention. Be precise. Describe place then character Variety. Danger words. Shiny words. Avoid chunks of dialogue. Get to the point. If the plot is rubbish then just describe. Sentence Starters The subject Facebook is changing the world we live in. 2. A Doing word (-ing or –ed word) Pressing the ‘like’ button lead me into a new networking world. Worried about your Facebook addiction? Don’t be. 3. A conjunction As with Facebook, Twitter also has its problems. 4. An adverb Excitedly I waited for my next friend request. 5. An adjective Angry and upset, I deleted the offensive wall post. 6. A short sentence for effect Pain. Excruciating pain. A/A* or 8/9 Oxymoron Irony Pun Parallelism Foreshadowing Pathetic Fallacy Antithesis Syndetic and Asyndetic listing Nominative determinism

Show, don’t tell

Language devices Metaphor A metaphor is a figurative language device that represents one thing as if it were another, or compares two things not normally viewed as similar, such as "time is a thief." This comparison draws attention to the way time is quick and stealthy. Simile A simile is similar to a metaphor in that it compares two unlike things; however, a simile compares using "like" or "as." For example, "she ran like the wind.“ Hyperbole Hyperbole is an overstatement or exaggeration of speech for an effect. In the example "the ball bounced to the sky," the ball did not literally reach the sky, but the hyperbolic expression suggests the ball bounced extremely high, so it seemed as though it touched the sky. Personification Describing an inanimate object with human or lifelike qualities is called personification. The sentence "The sun smiled down on me" depicts the sun as "smiling" to express the idea that sun rays feel friendly and warm, although a sun is incapable of literally smiling. Oxymoron An oxymoron is an example of figurative language that contains two seemingly contradictory elements, such as "wise fool," "jumbo shrimp" or "icy hot.“ Imagery Detailed description which incorporates many of the five senses -- sight, sound, smell, taste and touch -- is called imagery. When a writer uses imagery, he or she creates a "mental picture" for the reader. That means the descriptions are so vivid the reader can almost imagine he or she is there. Many of the other figurative language devices can be examples of imagery Your example:

5 Different Ways to start a sentence Sentences 5 Different Ways to start a sentence The subject Facebook is changing the world we live in. 2. A doing word (-ing or –ed word) Pressing the ‘like’ button lead me into a new networking world. Worried about your Facebook addiction? Don’t be. 3. A conjunction As with Facebook, Twitter also has its problems. 4. An adverb Excitedly I waited for my next friend request. 5. An adjective Angry and upset, I deleted the offensive wall post.

Planning – Skills Vocabulary Get rid of any boring, mono-syllabic words. Don’t repeat the same words too much. Have you used any descriptive techniques? Punctuation Have you used commas? Have you used a semi-colon? Have you used ellipsis? Sentence structures Have you used a simple sentence for effect? Have you used compound sentences? Have you used complex sentences? Spelling and Grammar Have you used capital letters and full stops correctly? Have you spelt everything correctly? Paragraph Did you use paragraphs correctly? Do your paragraphs link?

Planning – Content Third paragraph What is happening? Describe Adverbs + adjectives Semi – colon Start sentence with a verb Paragraph 4, 5,6 etc Development/conflict/resolution Repeat skills First paragraph Where is it set? Describe it 5 senses Onomatopoeia Personification Start sentence with the subject Second paragraph Who is our character? Describe them Metaphor and Simile Start sentence with an adverb

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