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NO F_N WORD LOSS WORD A loss for words A Loss 4 words No fun without U

QUIZ ERROR CORRECTION (text level) Course Evaluation LAST TUTORIAL QUIZ ERROR CORRECTION (text level) Course Evaluation

QUIZ TIME! (15 minutes)

TODAY’S FOCUS TEXT LEVEL ERROR ANALYSIS Hunger Games (review)

How much do you remember? When you rewrite a student’s paper, “try to put in as many of the student’s words, but help enrich their work in these ways”: Experientially Interpersonally Textually Enrich their choices of Verb Groups and Noun Groups Correct for Mood, Modality, Pronouns, Evaluative Wordings Theme/ rheme, discourse markers

How much do you remember? When you do your error analysis on the exam, how will you begin your discussion? This is wrong because the tense should be past. The problem is bad grammar. The problem is inappropriate clause structure. It is wrong because I am the teacher and I say it is. Clause structure Pronoun choice Noun group choice Verb group choice Inappropriate Faulty Non-systemic : “not possible in the system of the English language”

How much do you remember? Which of these is appropriate to use on your final exam? The intended meaning is… The writer thinks that… The writer’s probable meaning is… The writer told me that… I can read the writer’s mind so the answer is… I’d love to have a latte right about now…

Text-level Error Analysis STEPS READ the text. REWRITE the text. ANALYSE the changes you made in your rewrite (using SFG framework).

Text Level Error Analysis Steps Read the text. As you do, you will notice some problems. Rewrite the text. Solve/tidy up the problems you identified. Analyze the text. What changes did you make when you rewrote the text? As you consider the changes you made, what can you discover about the most problematic areas this writer had? Were the change you made to the original text more in the area of interpersonal meaning? Experiential meaning? Use that to explain/ analyze the text.

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Text Level Error Analysis Steps Read the text. As you do, you will notice some problems. Rewrite the text. Solve/tidy up the problems you identified. Analyze the text. What changes did you make when you rewrote the text? As you consider the changes you made, what can you discover about the most problematic areas this writer had? Were the change you made to the original text more in the area of interpersonal meaning? Experiential meaning? Use that to explain/ analyze the text. WRITE IN COMPLETE SENTENCES

One possible revision Last weekend my family and I went on a picnic. We went there by bus. We were very excited about going. We enjoyed our BBQ and we ate a lot of food such as chicken legs, fishballs and other meat. I said to my brother, “What are we going to do after lunch?” My brother said, “We will fly our kite and play badminton.” Suddenly the rain started. We felt very upset. Then we went under a tree and sat. Then later, the rain stopped. We were happy again and we enjoyed our picnic. We flew kites and played badminton. We had a lot of fun.

Explanation The main problem is interpersonal, because ‘tense’ is the least well-controlled grammatical system. For example, say, start, feel, go, sit, stop, play and have should all be written in past form to express remoteness. This is a narrative recount of the author’s past, so past tense is the correct choice. The author’s use of simple present causes confusion.

Explanation Experientially there are some problems, too. Several NGs are faulty because a missing or faulty article choice (deictic). For example, went to picnic; under the tree. The choice of our was used in the revision as it made for a better deictic choice in this personal recount. The choice of the verb flew co-occurs with kite, as does the preposition on with went on a picnic. Other examples of faulty NGS are “ that what are we going to do after lunch?”

Explanation Finally, the orthographic system of quotation marks to indicate dialogue is not developed and problematic here.

This will be on the final exam. You will be given a text to rewrite and then analyze. Mooodle

TAKE A BREAK: 10 MINUTES

Review

Hunger Games (handout)

Hold hands. Imperative NT/Vi   Come come! * ~ Hold hands. Imperative NT/Vi And the library. All mahogany. Hello! Hello! Not yet not yet. No. No. No. Oooh. Curtains! ~ Everybody who’s anybody is here. And they all want to meet you. Vo/ T Flavious! Octavia! * * Try one of these. They are divine. Imperative Declarative + * I can’t eat another thing. Monotransitive Declarative Here. # What’s this? Relational It’s for when you’re full. + It makes you sick. So you can go on eating. Complex Transitive How else can you taste everything? I think it’s time for a dance. Katniss? * ~ ~ People are starving in 12. Vo/T NT/Ving Declarative Here they’re just throwing it up to stuff more in. Katniss? Peeta. This is Plutarch Heavensbee. Head Gamemaker. Successor to Seneca Crane. That’s a tough act to follow. Copular Peeta! * May I? Interrogative Please. So how do you like the party? + # It’s a little overwhelming. Copular Relational  It’s appalling. Still if you abandon your moral judgment it can be fun. Probability/ median

I’m the head gamemaker, fun is my job. Relational   So, are you having fun? # I’m the head gamemaker, fun is my job. Relational I thought that was what happened to Seneca Crane. Too much fun. Mental + ~ ~ Seneca decided to quit breathing. T/Ved NT/Vi Monotransitive Decided. It was that or poison berries. Relational ~ Being Head Gamemaker has never been the most secure job in the world. NT/Ven Then, why are you here? + Same reason as you, I volunteered. Intransitive Why? Ambition. The chance to make the games mean something. The games don’t mean anything. They only mean to scare us. Well maybe it was you who inspired me to come back.  Ah! The presidential welcome. I’m sure we’ll meet again. Inclination/ High Katniss, come. The President awaits. Intransitive You think we convinced him? I’m not sure what else we can do. Monotransitive Tonight, on this the last day of their tour, I want to welcome our two victors… …Two young people who embody our ideals of strength and valor. And I personally want to congratulate them on the announcement of their engagement. Your love has inspired us. NT/Ven And I know it will go on inspiring us every day for as long as you may live. Probability/ low

We’ve come to the end! Buh Bye! Thank you for a good semester! I learned a lot! One last thing: Please fill out the COURSE EVALUATIONS. Buh Bye!