Coherence and Peer Critiques Week Ten

Transitions and Strong Topic Sentences Peer Critiques Lesson objectives Practice Coherence Transitions and Strong Topic Sentences Peer Critiques

Coherence “Coherence is an experience we create for ourselves as we make our own sense out of what we read” (First- Year Writing 197). Point: Coherence is created by readers. Counter-Point: Authors must structure paper to create a sense of coherence for readers.

Subjects Keep your subjects clean! 1a. Resistance in Nevada against its use as a waste disposal site has been heated. 1b. Nevada HAS heatedly RESISTED its use as a waste disposal site. (First-Year Writing 203)

Keep Your subjects clean! “However, it is Juliet who grounds the metaphoric poet.” “However, Juliet grounds the metaphoric poet.” “Instead, the passion the lovers feel will lead (them) to a holy, purer love.” How would you clean up this subject?

Transitions and strong topic sentences Think double-hook Three kinds of Order Chronological Coordinate Logical Topic Sentences: “Toward the end of that point sentence, name the key themes that thread through what follows” (First-Year Writing 202).

“Is it?: Romance and Love in Romeo and Juliet” “Courtly tropes dominate Romeo and Juliet, and while Romeo constructs his ideas of love on a foundation of courtly love, he also complicates these tropes. … Whittier suggests that Romeo is merely applying the conventions of courtly [love], while his real desire lies elsewhere.” “Such a suggestion demands a new reading of the text. In this reading, ‘Cupid’s arrow’ turns into a metaphor for the phallus, which Rosaline escapes using Diana’s wit. …The final couplet demonstrates his frustration, which does not stem from Rosaline’s sacred love. Rather, Romeo laments what lies between her legs, and out of his word’s reach.”

Revision plan / Peer Critiques Rules for Plan: Avoid Yes/No Answers Avoid “You/I” Statements Provide Positive and Constructive Criticism Exude Professionalism

Homework Saturday: Tuesday Turn in Peer Critiques 1.1a and 1.1b First-Year Writing: Ch. 9 (183-196) St. Martin’s Handbook: Ch. 4f, 4h, 5f1 Return Peer Critiques for Classmates