YEAR 10 ENGLISH LANGUAGE FEEDBACK April mock Are you ready to work hard and get better? YEAR 10 ENGLISH LANGUAGE FEEDBACK

WORD CLASSES… Noun – Adjective - Verb - Adverb – Gives more information about a noun. e.g. blue, beautiful, historic, kind An object, person, place or idea. e.g. table, woman, Jane, Spain, peace. Concrete = the ones you can touch (pen)/ Abstract = the ones you can’t (love). An action or ‘doing’ word. e.g. go, jump, fly, look, see, (is/am/are/was/were) Dynamic = the ones you can see (jump)/ Stative = the ones you can’t (think) Gives more information about a verb. e.g. carefully, slowly, quickly, spontaneously, high Noun – Adjective - Verb - Adverb –

Question one 4 MARKS

QUESTION TWO 8 MARKS

How is language used to describe the rat? Look at each part underlined in red CAREFULLY. What techniques have been used?

Imagery: sense of sight Zoom-in: Use of dynamic verbs ‘pushing’ + ‘twisting’ Imagery: sense of sight Zoom-in: Two pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘wet’ + ‘greasy’ Symbolism/ Metaphor/ Imagery Zoom-in:Two pre-modifying qualitative adjectives ‘mean’ + ‘red’ Simile Zoom-in: verb phrase ‘weighed down’ or noun ‘overeating’

What should my TEA paragraphs look like? T: One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is… E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes… A: The use of (mention technique) implies that… This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys… Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because… What should it not look like? NOT BEGINNING WITH THE TECHNIQUE NO TECHNIQUE?! NO QUOTE?! NO ZOOM-IN?! MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES MISLABELLED WORD CLASSES NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON #SNOOZEFEST

What should my TEA paragraphs look like? T: One of the most prominent language techniques used by the writer is symbolism. E: This may be observed in line 9 where the writer describes the rat as having “mean read eyes.” A: The use of symbolism implies that the rat is almost a demonic creature as “red” often has connotations with the devil or something of an evil nature. This also reveals that Alfred views the rat as an intimidating being, something which should be feared. The use of the pre-modifying qualitative adjective “mean” also personifies the rat’s eyes which leads the reader to believe that the rat is a sly and cunning animal. The use of two adjectives side by side further reiterates the negative connotations of the rat’s physical appearance, hyperbolising the hideous impression that the rat evokes.

How is language used to describe the rat? Choose one of the ideas we have discussed and write the PERFECT TEA paragraph. I want to see the ‘big’ technique first and your ideas as to why it’s used; then zoom-in and explore connotations.

QUESTION THREE 8 MARKS

Can you spot any of these techniques in the text? Structure techniques DEVELOPMENT (beginning, middle, end) PARAGRAPH LENGTH CHRONOLOGICAL Linear Non-linear NARRATIVE PERSPECTIVE First person Second person Third person LIMITED NARRATOR UNRELIABLE NARRATOR OMNISCIENT NARRATOR FLASHBACK DIALOGUE TRIPARTITE LIST JUXTAPOSITION SYNDETIC/ ASYNDETIC LISTING REPETITION SENTENCE LENGTH SENTENCE FUNCTION SENTENCE TYPE Minor sentence Simple sentence Compound sentence Complex sentence Compound complex sentence Can you spot any of these techniques in the text?

Okay, we’ve spotted the techniques, but what can we say about them? EVIDENCE ANALYSIS Simple sentence “Alfred felt something move.” Abrupt opening Limited information Creates ambiguity Through the use of the noun “something” the reader is left feeling compelled to investigate the source of the movement. Dialogue/ Exclamative “Rat!” Asyndetic listing/ Ellipsis “Anger… hate… loss… pain” Repetition/ Anaphora “Almost used to/” “Used to” Complex sentence “He knew it was wrong to be even remotely used to such sights, or to any of it, even for a second, let alone forever…

What should my TEA paragraphs look like? T: One of the most prominent structural techniques used by the writer at the beginning of the text is… As the text develops, another prominent structural technique is… Towards the end of the extract, the writer uses… E: This may be observed in line… where the writer describes… A: The use of (mention technique) implies that… This also suggests/ implies/ reveals/ conveys… Through the use of the noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb (mention the word) the writer creates a sense of… This noun/ adjective/ verb/ adverb also has connotations with… so could be used to imply… This interests the reader because… What should it not look like? NOT WORKING THROUGH THE TEXT CHRONOLOGICALLY NO TECHNIQUE?! NO QUOTE?! NO ZOOM-IN?! MISLABELLED TECHNIQUES NO OR INADEQUATE ANALYSIS SWEARING: SHOWS, QUOTE, SAYS, MAKES THE READER WANT TO READ ON #SNOOZEFEST

QUESTION FOUR 20 MARKS

This should be a SWEATY paragraph… I completely agree… I complete disagree… OR To some extent I agree… To some extent I disagree…

Conveys Exhibited Reduces Extended Comparing Disposed Reinforced Imply Flashback Graphic Simile Dehumanising Image verb Conveys Exhibited Reduces Extended Comparing Disposed Reinforced Imply Casually immune

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QUESTION FIVE 40 MARKS = 24+16

11/40 6+5

15/40 8+7

25/40 15+10

34/40 20+14

PAPER 2

QUESTION ONE 4 MARKS

A,C,E,F

QUESTION TWO 8 MARKS

Both Range Target Different Focuses

However Suggesting Reinforced Implying

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Effective vocabulary Adverb Simile Violent phrase visualise Witnessed Intervention Hovered Illusion Confirms inexplicable

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Perspectives First hand accounts Interviews comment Both Convey Witnessed Despite Sceptic Rational comment

Presents this case Vocabulary Personifying First hand account Factual ironically Suggests Supernatural Amused Method Convincing Invented offered

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15/20

8/40 4+4

18/40 11+7

25/40 15+10

36/40 21+15