First Draft Summary: Topic sentences, transitions The topic sentence should identify the part of the video Example: The beginning of the video consisted of an opening sequence and a short introduction of the dish.

First Draft Comments: Direct quotations Every comment that you refer to should be directly quoted (Why?). If a comment is long, paraphrase the part that is not essential but use a direct quotation for the part that is important for your point. Make sure that the paragraph flows. Always introduce and explain direct quotations (PIE). Correctly format quotations (comma, colon; never a semi-colon).

First Draft Comments: Direct quotations Use commas if the verb of the sentence is a verb of saying, the verb appears before the quotation, the part of the sentence before the quotation is not a complete sentence, and the quotation itself is a complete sentence. Only use a colon if the part of the sentence before the quotation is a complete sentence. Refer to the links to direct quotations and indirect quotations on the course web page.

First Draft Personal narrative You should have selected a video that you can test. You will be reporting the results of your test in your personal narrative. If your test is different in a significant way from the demonstration in the video then you need to clearly state what you did differently (substitution; skipped a step; guessed; followed suggestions from a commenter). You might run multiple tests in order to expand your personal narrative.

First Draft Evaluation Consider the data from the comments from two angles (this might result in two paragraphs) Angle 1: Suggestions for the videomaker to improve the video. Angle 2: Identifying an appropriate audience or appropriate audiences for the video (as well as inappropriate audiences) and suggestions for how to use the video for appropriate audiences.