Legalization Weeds & Roses

Things to improve on from your last analysis assignment-Quote Analysis Analyzing is not a journal entry. No judgment or cheerleading. Analysis needs more textual proof/ examples. Analyzing is not a summary.

GREAT IMPROVEMENT! You are getting analysis! There were no journal entries, very little judgment, but still some cheerleading, much more textual proof. Summary is still somewhat an issue. Make sure you are analyzing by: 1) Talking about what the author does and 2) Answering Por que?-- why in the world does he do this? Nice job discussing pathos, ethos & logos, colloquial diction, etc. It’s lovely to see you learned—an can still apply—knowledge from last year!

Some hints/ things to work on for today’s Football Analysis: Discuss author’s purpose in the beginning—it functions as your thesis Move chronologically through the passage. Be thorough in your analysis; it is essential to your success. Picking a few things to discuss is not sufficient. Add more proof!

Try this approach: I II III IV State subject Identify technique (word choice, imagery, tone, etc.) + example III In order to… IV State the purpose; connect back to thesis The author/ speaker… Uses the image of stinging darts In order to Allow his white audience (who have not experienced segregation) to make them momentary feel the discomfort and pain, hoping that they will be more apt to stop the practice entirely.

(generic, simplified, duh) vs. FLY SWATTER analysis Make your analysis specific and meaningful (have something interesting to say). BLANKET statements (generic, simplified, duh) vs. FLY SWATTER analysis (on-the-nose-specific- that’s-exactly-what-it-is!)

BLANKET: The author uses examples of children in order to evoke emotion from the reader. BETTER: Because of their innocence, the author uses children to evoke feelings of compassion and sympathy in his readers. FLY-SWATTER: By using children, the writer aims for his reader to not only feel the initial emotions of sympathy and pity, but more importantly, the indignation and desire to protect these young and innocent victims from the advocates of legalization.

Now you try. Change these general, blanket statements (which scored a 5 or 6) to specific, powerful, fly-swatter analysis (make it score an 8 or 9). At the end of the passage, the speaker utilizes a list of how family life and children can be affected in order to connect with the reader in hopes of drawing the reader to his views. 2) The author uses “maiming” to describe how horrible the consequences of drugs are. 3) By saying that there will be “unpublicized” deaths makes the reader fear that there are a lot of tragedies they haven’t heard about.

Grading SIB=Say it better WC=Word Choice 9-- 20/20- Awesome analysis 8-- 19/20-- Very strong 7-- 18/20-- Complete & accurate 6-- 16/20-- “Gets it”; analyzing well; could use more development/ thoroughness or sharper commentary 5-- 15/20-- “Uneven feel”; Analyzing for the most part; may be more underdeveloped or incomplete feeling 4-- 14/20-- Not completely analysis; may be incomplete and underdeveloped 3-- 13/20-- Not analysis, inaccurate; extremely underdeveloped 2--12/20-- Not analysis, inaccurate, too many errors