Paper 1 Section B – The basics Do Less: Well!

What you are marked on? AO5 and AO6 Paragraphs: Ensure that they are accurate – remember TiPToP (Change with each new Time, Place, Topic and Person speaking.) Use structural techniques – repetition, contrast Maintain your tone, style and register throughout to suit your purpose (it is easier to write about negative things than positive). Select your use of figurative language for effect (use key techniques: Pathetic fallacy, personification, alliteration, metaphors and similes). Spelling – Proof read. Have you checked that you have used the correct version of a word. Revise the spellings of excellent vocabulary words and then use them. Use high level vocabulary. Use accurate punctuation and high level punctuation (ellipsis, semi-colons, brackets, commas). Use punctuation to try to create effects. E.g. to add suspense.

Task: Look carefully at the image and break it down into different sections. Pick one box to describe first. Each box should be a paragraph – consider how you will connect each one. Consider the colour, weather, feelings and textures that could be in the scene. Remember to vary your sentence styles: Simile start It wasn’t/ it was So, so Adverb comma Verb beginning Triple noun colon Try to include an interesting structural technique: E.g. Link your opening and closing lines, include a flashback; rhetorical devices.

Huffing, wheezing, chugging – the factory towers sent billowing smoke spiraling into the smog filled air. Their grey forms loomed over the city’s streets like cross parents, angry at their tiny child houses that cluttered the space below. The mist turned their grey shapes into ghosts, shivering in the early morning air. The air felt as cold as ice on the mother’s face, as she wrapped her arms around the her sleepy son. They had been walking to the factory to start the early shift, when his pale legs had given way, and he had tumbled to the floor like a rag doll. Hunger crawled up his back and pushed him down onto the concrete floor. She sobbed quietly as she tried to revive him and looked around urgently for someone to help. Carelessly, she had dropped the bundle on the floor when Tim collapsed. Now it sat there, soggy from the damp floor, and becoming soggier from the drizzling rain. The bad wasn’t just a bundle of their possessions, it was their entire world scooped up in a thin white cloth and tied in a bundled knot. Sad and dejected, Tim’s hat sat where it had fallen as he tumbled to the ground. Its fabric was worn and the smoke from the factory had turned its once light brown material to a dull grey. Grey as his lungs, grey as his heart, grey as his soul. Coughing, spluttering and choking, Tim’s eyes fluttered open and his mother crammed her last piece of sweet bread into his mouth, encouraging him to chew. Their bodies turned into grey ghosts, as they trudged towards the factory for another day of grueling work. Example:

Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Look at the image provided – Write about a time you felt like you were being watched. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar. Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Look at the image provided – Write about a time you felt like you were being watched. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar.

Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Write about a time when your environment has scared you because you felt alone and/or isolated. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar. Write about a time when your environment has scared you because you felt alone and/or isolated. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar.

Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Look at the image provided – Write about a time you felt trapped and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar. Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Look at the image provided – Write about a time you felt trapped and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar.

Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Write about a time when you had to face the consequences of your decisions/actions, and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar. Write about a time when you had to face the consequences of your decisions/actions, and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar.

Section B Writing 45 minutes – 40 marks – 1 question Write about a time when you felt excluded, and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar. Write about a time when you felt excluded, and how that made you feel. Your response could be real or imagined. AO focus – vocabulary, spelling, punctuation + grammar.

What you must do… Be Creative-sprinkle language techniques to layer your response. (small details can be far greater using adjectives, similes, personification) The use of senses can heightened the experience for your reader. Small character list- max 3 Narration- 1st or Omniscient