Essay organization & revision Chapter 4

About revision For revision, we often use correction codes. These codes save space because they are usually just a few letters. You should have correction codes on your essays.

Correction Codes WC Word Choice: The word used is not correct and needs to be changed. WF Word Form: The word is correct but the wrong form of the word is used. WO Word Order: The words or phrases in the sentence are not in proper order. MW Missing Word: A word has been omitted and should be added.

Correction Codes X Extra Word: The word should be deleted. SP Spelling: The word is misspelled. P Punctuation: The wrong punctuation has been used. VT Verb Tense: The tense of the verb is incorrect.

Correction Codes frag Fragment: Not a complete sentence. RO Run-on: The sentence should be two or more sentences, not one. ? Not clear: The area noted is not clear. R Register: The word(s) and/or style used are inappropriate for the assessment. RW Rewrite

Transitions Activity 10, page 100 How did you organize the transitions?

Common Methods of Conclusion 1. End with a summary and final thought. Restate thesis and main points, but try to use different words. In conclusion, China should discontinue using the Gao Kao as the main method of evaluating students for collage admittance. First, this exam causes too much stress for students and families. Second, since the test can only be taken once a year, it automatically punishes students who may be sick during that time or experiencing family emergencies. Third, this assessment often does not adequately assess the skills that it claims to be assessing. For these reasons, China should use other methods in evaluating students for acceptance in its universities.

Part 2: Conclusions Agenda DOL Conclusions Self editing

DOL: Use editing codes to correct the paragraph My Stepmother is the genealogist of the family. She maintains records of births, deaths, marriages, and divorces. She takes the job real serious. She sends message to the family whoever something noteworthy occurs. We recently had a bulletin about the demise of the relative during the American Civil War– which took place a century-and-a-half ago.

Common Methods of Conclusion 2. Include a thought-provoking question or short series of questions A question must deal with: a. Why your subject is important b. What might happen in the future c. What should be done about the subject. d. What choice should be made. The question must be related to your thesis.

Common Methods of Conclusion 2. Include a thought-provoking question or short series of questions Why should China discontinue to use the Gao Kao as the main method for admitting students into its universities? First, students and families should not be under the large amount of stress caused by this test. Second, since the test can only be taken once in a year, it unfairly punishes students who may be dealing with extenuating circumstances. Third, the test is not a true indication of a student’s talent and only assesses what a student can recall in a three day period. Considering these factors, China should consider alternative methods of assessing students.

Common Methods of Conclusion 3. End with a prediction or a recommendation In closing, if China continues to use the Gao Kao as the main method for admitting students into its universities, students and families will continue to be under a large amount of stress caused by this test. Undoubtedly, more stories of students attempting suicides will abound. Additionally, more students will probably opt to go abroad or find alternative educational means instead of Chinese universities because, while these alternative means may be more expensive, they will not require another year of high school. Also, with the continuation of the Gao Kao, China will continue to fail to uncover the true talents of their youth. For these reasons, China should revise the Gao Kao.

Common Methods of Conclusion Outline V. Concluding Paragraph A. Restate thesis as either a statement, question or a prediction. B. Restate main points of the essay C. Final Thought

Introductions and conclusions Do activity 13, page 103 Decide which description (letters) fit with the introductions and conclusions. Not all letters will be used.

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