Malala and Clinton speeches Commonalities of conditions that are necessary to a lasting peace and security in the world

Building Background He Named Me Malala- https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jtROMdwltJE Malala’s Story- https://www.malala.org/malalas-story Malala’s Blog before the attack- http://www.bbc.com/news/magazine-19899540

Prompt Breakdown On the back of the last page of your packet, rewrite the prompt and complete a prompt breakdown. **Instead of writing a thesis based on the “fake articles” that we “fake read” that include two points, leave those points blank** Explain the conditions that are necessary to a lasting peace and security in the world according to both speeches. Your essay must be based on the ideas and information found in the texts. Manage your time carefully so that you can • read the passages; • plan your response; • write your response; and • revise and edit your response. Your written response should be in the form of a multi-paragraph essay.

How do we organize this essay? How should we NOT organize this essay? How to organize Based on conditions of peace and security Each condition will have its own paragraph Example: One body paragraph about equality of education One body paragraph about women’s equality What not to do! Do NOT organize it by author of the speech or speech title! Your essay should not have one body paragraph about Malala and one body paragraph about Clinton

How do we take notes as we read? Use 2 column notes page (last page in packet) Look for conditions necessary for peace OR Examples to support conditions necessary for peace

Look at the outline given! Start with the left column Take notes in the right column next Only fill in the bottom box when you are finished reading both pieces

Read the speeches- what to do Take notes on your outline Underline key words or phrases or pieces of evidence Write in the margins of the speeches

Let’s read… Underline key words and phrases Notes in margins Notes on outline

Common conditions? (Whole group discussion) What conditions for peace and security were called for in both speeches? What ideas did both speakers share? Remember that for any condition that you find, you will need to find evidence of that condition in both speeches. Can you find evidence for the common conditions required for peace in each speech? For the common conditions that you have identified, go back and find at least one piece of evidence in each speech. Which conditions seem to be most important in the two speeches? Are there conditions that seem to be more emphasized than others? If you feel that you have found too many common conditions between the speeches, do you see ways that you might combine ideas?

Thesis- fill in the blanks Using at least two common conditions, fill in the blanks of your thesis from your prompt breakdown Rewrite the thesis if you don’t like your original one

How do we create an outline? Written outline (next slide) Diamond outline (after next slide)

Written Outline Example Thesis: Before the world can enjoy peace and security, Malala Yousafzai and Hillary Clinton both argue that women and girls must be guaranteed equal rights and equal opportunities. Supporting point #1 Both speakers stress the need for governments to protect women and children from violence and poverty. Malala: Women and girls “are suffering most;” “poor children are victims of child labor.” “Protect children from brutality and harm” Clinton: Women must be “free from violence.” Women are “70% of world’s poor” Dying from diseases… “malnutrition caused by poverty.” Rape, “majority of world’s refugees” Supporting point #2 In addition to the right to basic protections, Malala and Clinton strongly call for women and children to receive equal opportunities, especially education. Malala: “The power of education” frightens extremists. “Weapon of knowledge” “We cannot all succeed when half of us are held back.” “One child, one teacher, one book, and one pen can change the world.” Clinton: Women are two-thirds of the world’s illiterate. “denied the right to go to school” “Every woman deserves the chance to realize her own God-given potential.”

Equal opportunity = strongly call for women and children to receive equal opportunities, especially education. Equal Rights = need for governments to protect women and children from violence and poverty. Malala: Women and girls “are suffering most;” “poor children are victims of child labor.” “Protect children from brutality and harm” Malala: “The power of education” frightens extremists. “Weapon of knowledge” “We cannot all succeed when half of us are held back.” “One child, one teacher, one book, and one pen can change the world.” Thesis: Before the world can enjoy peace and security, Malala Yousafzai and Hillary Clinton both argue that women and girls must be guaranteed equal rights and equal opportunities. Equal opportunity = Equal Rights = Clinton: Women are two-thirds of the world’s illiterate. “denied the right to go to school” “Every woman deserves the chance to realize her own God-given potential.” Clinton: Women must be “free from violence.” Women are “70% of world’s poor” Dying from diseases… “malnutrition caused by poverty.” Rape, “majority of world’s refugees” Diamond Example

YOU create an outline Use a separate sheet of paper

Let’s draft an essay! But first… What do the quote fail to include? Paragraph numbers in their citations! What must you include? Author’s name and paragraph number!