Summaries due next week No title page (but should include a title) Do not need a separate page for references Put your name on it If late, drop off at the Saint James welcome desk (only open during business hours) Follow formatting specifications detailed on the rubric Remember to revise, edit, and proofread

Edit > revise > edit > proofread Revising/editing/proofreading Edit > revise > edit > proofread

Revising Re-structuring Re-organizing Re-writing Re-thinking Adding or removing content Editing Revising at the sentence level Grammar and word choice Eliminating wordiness

What to look for in your peers’ drafts Content Accuracy Coherence Clear explanations Cites evidence from the text Structure Order of information How does it flow together? Do they need more paragraphs? Is information repeated later in the draft? Grammar Does every sentence have a subject and a verb? Go with what you know here. If you are unsure, focus on something else style Is it too “wordy” or repetitive? Is every quote introduced or framed? Check for transitions

What is grammar? “Sentences are the basic units in writing. Many people think of a sentence as a group of words that begins with a capital letter and ends with a period, but that definition includes grammatically incomplete sentences called fragments” (p.433).

“Sentences. basic units in writing. Many people. sentence “Sentences . . . basic units in writing. Many people . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . sentence . . . Group of words . . . . . . . Capital letter . . . Period, but . . . definition . . . grammatically incomplete sentences . . . . . .. . fragments” (p. 433).

“Sentences are the basic units in writing “Sentences are the basic units in writing. Many people think of a sentence as a group of words that begins with a capital letter and ends with a period, but that definition includes grammatically incomplete sentences called fragments” (p.433).

Editing for grammar “The topics discussed in this official government document begin by telling the reader what are the most common mental health issues in Canada.” “To this day American society still struggles with body image through the media because it continues to emphasize this impractical ‘dream’ (p. 94).”

Editing for style “The author continues into thought on how . . . ” “comments being said about”

Paragraphs What is the unifying theme or idea? Are ideas following in a logical order? Do I need more paragraphs? Do I need to start a new paragraph? Do I need more transitions? Better transitions?

In many cases, however, blind spots are not so innocent – they are the result of motivated cognitive processes. One motive that has a strong influence on self-perception is the motive to maintain and enhance our self-worth (Sedikides & Gregg, 2008). There is a great deal of research documenting the lengths people will go in order to maintain a positive view of themselves, leading to flawed self-assessment (Dunning, 2005). While our desire to protect our sense of self-worth influences are self-perception, it is not clear that these biases are always in the positive direction. What is beyond doubt is that self-perception is not simply an objective, neutral process. Motivated cognition influences and distorts self-perception in a multitude of ways that help to create and maintain blind spots in self-knowledge. As a result, we cannot judge our own personality as dispassionately as we might a stranger’s. (Vazire and Carlson, 2011, 104-105) Continuing to discuss this topic, but with further detail. Authors explain the topic they introduced in the previous paragraph. They describe the most obvious item. Then they move on to the less obvious, and slightly more speculative. Then they discuss both at once, noting their shared property and confirming the basis for the claim they make about both. Restatement of premise. Finally, they conclude the paragraph by connecting that premise to one of their major claims.

Proofreading Checking the details before you submit, publish, or send ‘Typos’ (missing words and typing errors) Capitalization Spelling Mechanics Formatting

Workshop Can you comment on content? Accuracy Coherence Evidence Can you comment on Grammar? When in doubt, check the verbs Style Can you think of a way to eliminate words to make it more concise? How to use the comments Focus on clarity Take comments with a grain of salt. Do both editors agree? Do you have consistent problems with a particular sentences element? (For example, articles or verb tenses.)

No title page (but should include a title) Summaries due next week No title page (but should include a title) Do not need a separate page for references Follow formatting specifications detailed on the rubric Put your name on it! If late, drop off at the Saint James welcome desk (only open during business hours) Remember to revise, edit, and proofread