LC-1114 Communicating technology Writing the conclusion paragraph Peer review: A2 + A3

Now it’s time to write the conclusion paragraph for the recommendation

A recommendation report GENERAL CONTEXT Topic, focus and purpose of text Pattern: Problem-solution - Client’s situation-problem-solution-evaluation Introduction 200 words Body 300 words Conclusion 50 words Include the conclusion paragraph in the final version (A4) DESCRIPTION OF THE SOLUTION Pattern: Extended definition Sentence definition + 3-4 key properties RECOMMENDATION and summary of key ideas/arguments

The conclusion paragraph wraps up the piece of writing, leaving the reader with a sense of completeness. ?

Conclusion paragraph (re)state the recommendation This report recommends that Audi adopt the Torsen four-wheel drive system due to its cost-effectiveness and high performance. Although the Torsen system achieves less than optimal performance under extreme conditions and consumes higher amounts of energy through the transmission, it offers greater reliability and safety than Audi’s current drive system. Since the safety of the vehicle is one of the most crucial aspects in modern car design, Torsen is considered to be the most desirable option for Audi. (78 words) This report recommends that Audi adopt the Torsen four-wheel drive system due to its cost-effectiveness and high performance. Although the Torsen system achieves less than optimal performance under extreme conditions and consumes higher amounts of energy through the transmission, it offers greater reliability and safety than Audi’s current drive system. Since the safety of the vehicle is one of the most crucial aspects in modern car design, Torsen is considered to be the most desirable option for Audi. (re)state the recommendation

Conclusion paragraph This report recommends that Audi adopt the Torsen four-wheel drive system due to its cost-effectiveness and high performance. Although the Torsen system achieves less than optimal performance under extreme conditions and consumes higher amounts of energy through the transmission, it offers greater reliability and safety than Audi’s current drive system. Since the safety of the vehicle is one of the most crucial aspects in modern car design, Torsen is considered to be the most desirable option for Audi. (78 words) Summarize the main ideas to justify the recommendation

Conclusion paragraph Link the solution back to the original need. (Synthesize the key message about the topic) This report recommends that Audi adopt the Torsen four-wheel drive system due to its cost-effectiveness and high performance. Although the Torsen system achieves less than optimal performance under extreme conditions and consumes higher amounts of energy through the transmission, it offers greater reliability and safety than Audi’s current drive system. Since the safety of the vehicle is one of the most crucial aspects in modern car design, Torsen is considered to be the most desirable option for Audi. (78 words)

Conclusion paragraph Be brief and to the point. Synthesize, don’t repeat every detail Use different language when summarising or restating Do not provide any new information!

A4 Final recommendation report Audience = your client If you needed to send this report to the one who ordered it (from you, as the specialist) – who would you send it to? Topic Recommendation Pattern Problem solution Extended definition Audience Decision-makers, non-expert Length 500-600 words Graded 0-5 (weight 20%)

HOMEWORK - Online Module 3! ASSIGNMENT 4: final version of the recommendation report - Write the conclusion - Merge and revise, add the last paragraph - Submit to MyCourses. Deadline 23.10? - Length: 500–600 words PREPARE FOR THE EXAM - Formal style: vocabulary and grammar - Avoiding top-heavy sentences (end verbs) - Avoiding weak verbs and hiding action in the noun phrase. - Readability principles of given-before-new and topical info into subject position (topical focus). - Online Module 3! HOMEWORK Note: Final version of A3 to Emended by the 16th!

Peer review: A2 + A3

Peer review… …means that one student helps another student to do a better job of his/her work: develop the topic and clarify the ideas ensure clear, logical organization of content get another reader’s perspective on the writing

Peer review Read and analyse: write down your comments for the author. Use the questions in the checklist as a guideline for the critiquing process. You can also write your comments in the margin of the paper and use the numbers in the checklist. Share and discuss your comments with the author. At the end of the discussion, give the paper to the author.

Peer review: work in groups of 3 students STEP 1: give your paper to the student on your left. 20 min - Read text 1 and focus on questions in part 1: the content, the line of thought and the clarity of the message. STEP 2: pass the text on to the next student on your left. 20 min - Read text 2 and focus on questions in part 2: style and clarity of language. - If you have extra time, continue reading and focus on questions you haven’t yet considered, i.e. part 1 or part 2. STEP 3: get together with the other group members. 15-20 min - Discuss one text at a time. Explain your observations and share any improvement suggestions.

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