Bell work 8/28: Which of the following is the most effective thesis statement and why?  How do you know?  Explain your choice in 3-5 sentences.  Eating fast food is bad and should be avoided because it is unhealthy. Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because the fast food diet leads to preventable and expensive health issues, such as diabetes, obesity, and heart disease. Americans should eliminate the regular consumption of fast food because it leads to weight gain along with preventable health issues, and should instead opt for nutrient dense foods. 

Introductory Paragraph Begin an interesting grabber (question, quote, short, thought-provoking statement). Include the name of the play, along with the author’s FULL NAME. You must have a thesis about your character. Example: The role of women in literature has served as a reflection of their place in society.  Often times, these roles are indicative of the subordinate place women are given in respect to their male counterparts.  In William Shakespeare’s Hamlet (1992), Ophelia is an example of a female character who operates within rigid gender roles.  True to her time period, she is a woman living in the Elizabethan era who is restricted from having full autonomy.  Throughout the play, Ophelia is obedient to the commands of the men in her life, which yields her as a meek and submissive character.  

Statement/Proof/Analysis A guide to building strong paragraphs 

Why do we use SPA? The SPA format helps us create clear paragraphs with a thesis, evidence, and thoughtful analysis This triangle gives us a good idea of the proportions of the finished paragraph. 

Step 1: Statement = topic statement + thesis The statement informs the reader of the subject while making an argument/asserting a view Ex: HHS cafeteria food is overpriced and low quality.

Step 2: Proof Evidence supporting the statement Data/ statistics, textual evidence Ex: Prices have gone up from $2.25 in 2007, to $3.75 in 2015 (HamiltonHuskies.com).  According to 2012 HHS survey, the food has gotten greasier over time. 

Step 3: Analysis Explain how the proof supports the statement Include your thoughts (preferably based on ethos/pathos/logos) on why this has occurred, how it affects the audience, or possible solutions.  Ex: Due to the unreasonable $1.50 increase in food prices, students are less likely to eat in the cafeteria. Ultimately,  making the food less affordable has a negative impact on the school's overall revenue. 

...and then voilà! HHS cafeteria food is overpriced considering its low quality. Prices have risen from $2.25 in 2007, to $3.75 in 2015 (HamiltonHuskies.com). Due to the $1.50 increase in food prices and poor quality, students are less likely to eat in the cafeteria. Ultimately, increasing food prices for students has a negative impact on the school's overall revenue. 

Closing Task: "Giving Life After Death Row" (Longo, 2011) Task 1: Partners  Task 2: Ticket-Out-The-Door  With your partner, decide who will be #1 and #2 #1's will look for STATEMENT in the article  #2's will look for PROOF in the article Work together to make sure your STATEMENT and PROOF correspond with each other.  Individually and on your own sheet of paper, combine STATEMENT and PROOF Then you will have 10 minutes to add a thoughtful analysis like the one demonstrated earlier.  Turn the completed SPA paragraph into the bin before leaving! 

Jamie Oliver TED Talk Ticket-out-the-Door SOAPSTone  Rhetorical Analysis  On a sheet of paper evaluate: SPEAKER  OCCASION  AUDIENCE  PURPOSE  SUBJECT  Tone You must use details from the speech  On the same paper evaluate: Ethos Pathos  Logos  Author, audience, and purpose are included in SOAPSTone Use details from the speech 

APA Color-Coding Revision Workshop (Get into pairs) Statement (tells us which appeal and makes a claim about how the appeal is used  = underline in blue or black ink  Proof (evidence from the text that supports statement about the appeal) = pink highlighter **Circle the citation with pen/pencil.  Analysis (your interpretation/justification of the evidence) = green highlighter Are you missing any Statement, proof, analysis? How can they be improved?  Are your in-text citations in APA format? Ex: (Skloot, 2011, pg. 199). *Citations must have all 3 components! 

Statement/Proof/Analysis Example: Statement: Henrietta Lack’s informed consent signature was null/invalid because she was not fully informed of what was going to happen to her. Proof: “…something went wrong: in Henrietta’s medical record, one of her doctor’s wrote, ‘Told she could not have anymore children. Says if she had been told so before, she would not have gone through with treatment.’ But by the time she found out, it was too late” (Skloot 47-48). Analysis: The medical records show that Henrietta Lacks was not only kept out of the dark, but deliberately lied to. This is not a matter of her being unable or too illiterate to give consent, but rather a matter of honesty and ethics. Doctors kept information from her that would have ultimately impacted her decision, which makes her consent based on a lie and invalid.

BW: 9/7