Guidance on trying to get the most constructive / positive comments peer to peer

Be honest about the work. Be gentle on the person.

Writing constructive comments Be honest about the work. Be gentle on the person. One way is: 2 or 3 stars and a wish / tip for improvement Try to.... 3 stars & a tip for improvement

I thought you remembered . . . . . well. I liked . . . . “this phrase” I liked . . . . . . . . “this idea” I liked . . . . . . . . . . . “these words”. I found . . . . . I thought you remembered . . . . . well. Try to remember . . . . . . . I didn't understand . . . . . . . . . I wanted to know more about . . . . . . . . . . . ideas information clarity / clear dialogue Characters phrases similies metaphor adjectives tenses spellings Fullstops Capitals speech marks commas informative interesting amusing Things to think about / look out for when trying to think of a constructive comment Try to....

Example of a post: Example of REAL blog from a REAL school Hard to read the font so jump to next slide where the text is reproduced in easier font

Example of a post: Dear Mr Antef, I am writing to you because I believe that I would be a suitable candidate for the position of a fantastic grave robber.For example, I have stolen over 1 million gold from Tutankhamun's tomb! There is more evidence to support this is that I am quick,cunning and a master of disguise. Secondly, I have a question for you Mr Antef.The question is that, Are you fed up that you cant get the job done for you Mr Antef? Well you got the right person for the job and the person is me.Because I am quick, cunning and I am very tricky so the guards will never catch me.In my opinion, I think you need another big kerpees because he doesnt look strong enough. Additionally, I have more evidence to support this because when I hide behind a rock I can camoflouge myself like a chameleon. Eventually, When I hide behind rocks in dark caves the guards will run away from a fake monster and scream out loud, Then I can get on stealing some more gold from Tutenkhamens tomb!!! Finally, I have two more quesions to ask you Mr Antef.My first question is that why couldn't you choose me instead of Paneb? My second question is that why dont you join my team and get my job done,or should I say yours and my job done? So we could be rich and become kings of Egypt? Thank you in advance for your response Yours sincerely , Alisha Read to class. Get pupils to identify and acknowledge the good stuff. Paragraphs Descriptive phrases (eg: quick,cunning and a master of disguise.) Time Connectives (Secondly, Additionally, Eventually , Finally Similie (3rd para camouflage myself like a chameleon) Etc ? What to improve? Spellings ? Last para is a bit unclear ? The FONT we couldn’t read is the key thing!

Quality comments? The paragraphs are used well. Sentence starters are very good. I like the phrases: “master of disguise” and “camouflage myself like a chameleon”. The font you chose looks like real handwriting BUT it’s very hard to read. I nearly didn’t bother! Different Comments Orange = nice but of no use to develop & get better. Green = Constructive / Positive / Useful

Remember: KEEP personal information safe: avoid real names no details of places / locations no contact details (phone, email) THINK: What might be the risk ?

Be honest about the work. Be gentle on the person.

Questions ?

Your name: W W ill Smit Smit h Your username is built like this: 014

my.uso.im Where to go: 1) Log on to your computer 2) Open a web browser 3) Type in the address bar: my.uso.im

A pupil's "post" A reader's "comment"