Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) Directions: Rewrite the following details, using the method indicated in parentheses. 1. Nelson walked out the door, obviously pleased with himself. (Use vivid words.) 2. Rip is an old dog. (Show, don’t tell.)

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) Directions: Rewrite the following details, using the method indicated in parentheses. Sample Answers: 1. Nelson walked out the door, obviously pleased with himself. (Use vivid words.) Nelson sauntered out the door, a smug smile on his face. 2. Rip is an old dog. (Show, don’t tell.)

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) Directions: Rewrite the following details, using the method indicated in parentheses. 1. Nelson walked out the door, obviously pleased with himself. (Use vivid words.) Nelson sauntered out the door, a smug smile on his face. 2. Rip is an old dog. (Show, don’t tell.) Rip dropped to my feet; his tired old eyes spoke of years of chasing rabbits in the meadow.

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) 3. The scream from the attic scared me to death. (Avoid clichés.) 4. My cousin is such a brat. (Provide specific examples.)

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) 3. The scream from the attic scared me to death. (Avoid clichés.) The scream from the attic pierced my heart and reduced me to a shivering little boy. 4. My cousin is such a brat. (Provide specific examples.)

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) 3. The scream from the attic scared me to death. (Avoid clichés.) The scream from the attic pierced my heart and reduced me to a shivering little boy. 4. My cousin is such a brat. (Provide specific examples.) My cousin is our family’s practical jokester. Once he “accidently” dialed 9-1-1 so that our Thanksgiving dinner was interrupted by a visit from the police.

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) 5. Alan read the book quickly while eating breakfast. (Use vivid words.)

Lesson 7 Effective Details Activity 7.1 Vivid, Specific Words (p. 87) 5. Alan read the book quickly while eating breakfast. (Use vivid words.) Alan ate with the book propped up against his cereal box. Every few seconds, he turned a page, oblivious of the drops of milk that escaped his mouth and ran down his chin.

Strategy: An Observation Chart Sight Sound Smell Taste Touch

Example: A Day at the Beach Sight golden sand turquoise waves lifeguards with whistles seashells father and son building sand castle Sound roar of the ocean ice cream truck bells children laughing shrill of lifeguard whistle cry of seagull Smell sunscreen salty air seaweed Taste salty ocean water chocolaty fudge pop Touch grainy sand beneath my feet ice cold water sun on my back wind in my hair greasy sunscreen