Take a few minutes to observe this picture carefully. What do you notice about color in this painting? What shapes can you describe? What can you identify in the scene? Can you predict if the setting is urban, suburban or rural?

LO:To create a compelling narrative 15/06/12 Language and the Making of Place LO:To create a compelling narrative By the end of the lesson you will have: C used first person narration to create a coherent point of view B employed meaning through structure as well as narrative A/A* created depth of narrative through both structure and language. using detail based on sense impressions – what can be seen, heard, smelt, touchedor tasted • basing settings on known places plus some invented detail • using real or invented names to bring places alive – to help to make the setting more real and more believable • creating atmosphere, e.g. what is hidden, what is dangerous, what looks unusual, what is out of place • using the weather, time of day and season as well as place • lulling the reader into a false sense of security that all is well

Even though paintings are flat, some parts look far away, while other parts seem to be very close. How does the painter do that? Notice what is placed at the top of the page. Is it near or far away objects? Look at the buildings on the left. What size are the ones that seem far away? Look for examples of one object hiding or overlapping part of another object. Which object appears farther away?

Now, focus on light, shadow and color in the painting. Can you predict from the shadows where the sun may be? Can you predict the time of day? Why do you think that? What about the season? Does it look like winter, spring, summer or autumn? What evidence is there in the painting?

Listen and Learn!

Write your own descriptive paragraph

WABOLL its a nice summer day And check out the grey pebbly beach with the seagull on it which is grey, and feathered, and has a funny beak, which is curvy, and orang. Unpick the errors! Why is this What A Bad One Looks Like

WAGOLL It is Spring, moonless night in the small town, starless and bible-black, the cobblestreets silent and the hunched, courters'-and- rabbits' wood limping invisible down to the sloeblack, slow, black, crowblack, fishingboat-bobbing sea. The houses are blind as moles (though moles see fine to-night in the snouting, velvet dingles) or blind as Captain Cat there in the muffled middle by the pump and the town clock, the shops in mourning, the Welfare Hall in widows' weeds. And all the people of the lulled and dumbfound town are sleeping now. (Under Milk Wood)

Peer Assess What works well… I like how you have used an unusual simile, ‘The houses are blind as moles Even better if…. You could have used a short snappy sentence. Eg. ‘Seagulls squawked’ C B/A You have used a range of long and short sentences You have used discourse markers to give sequence (First, Second, Finally) You have used punctuation mostly accurately (, .) You have used a consistent narrative point of view. You have used discourse markers to mark either foregrounded or backgrounded information (But that was then) You have used a range of punctuation with precision to create impact (; : ! ‘) structure and language.