Commas Editing Invitation Day 1 Commas Commas in a series Editing Invitation

Invitation to Notice & Imitate Day 1 “The rat licked his lips, grabbed a napkin, and scurried down the hill for some dinner in the dell.” Name all the punctuation marks you notice… Thumbs up if you noticed: Period Quotation marks Commas Excerpt from The Cheese by Margie Palatini (pg. 3)

Invitation to Notice & Imitate Day 1 “FLO-O-O-OSSIE! The sound of Big Mama’s voice floated past the cabins in Sophie’s Quarters, round the smokehouse, beyond the chicken coop, all the way down to Flossie Finley.” Commas Excerpt from Flossie & The Fox by Patricia C. McKissack (pg. 5)

Invitation to Notice & Imitate Day 1 Commas keep words and ideas from running together. They tell your reader where to pause, which makes your writing easier to read. Place commas between words, phrases, or clauses in a series. (A series is three or more items in a row.) Add commas between words in a series between phrases in a series Hanae likes pepperoni, pineapple, and olives on her pizza. During the summer I read mysteries, ride my bike, and play basketball. Excerpt from Texas Write Source (pg. 530)

Commas Editing Invitation Day 2 Commas Commas in a Series Editing Invitation

Invitation to Write & Celebrate Day 2 “The rat licked his lips, grabbed a napkin, and scurried down the hill for some dinner in the dell.” “FLO-O-O-OSSIE! The sound of Big Mama’s voice floated past the cabins in Sophie’s Quarters, round the smokehouse, beyond the chicken coop, all the way down to Flossie Finley.” Place commas between words, phrases, or clauses in a series. (A series is three or more items in a row.) First Excerpt from The Cheese by Margie Palatini (pg. 3) Second Excerpt from Flossie & The Fox by Patricia C. McKissack (pg. 5)

Day 2 Let’s try it out! Find a piece of writing where you could add commas in a series. Share Time! Let’s SAY some revised sentences with commas in a series! Let’s check with a partner to see if our commas are in the correct place…. Share Time! Let’s SAY some revised sentences with commas in a series!

Day 3 Commas Commas in a Series Editing Invitation

Test Talk: We Try It Together Day 3 Doug wrote a story about a great present he got. Read his paper and look for ways she should revise/edit it. (1) I got the best birthday present ever for my tenth birthday. (2) It’s a Special Edition Elixir Robot, built especially for kids aged eight to ten. (3) I named the robot Harvey, and I invited all my friends over to show what it could do. (4) Harvey cleaned my room in five minutes flat read us an adventure story about a space explorer, and told us a funny joke. (5) After that, we went outside, and Harvey taught us some soccer moves. (6) My friends’ mouths opened wide, and I said, “If you’re nice to me, I’ll let you play with the robot.” (7) They all left after that. (8) After school, I couldn’t wait to get home and turn on Harvey. (9) It helped me with homework and explained what the teacher left out. (10) Harvey played board games with me, watched a movie, and helped clean my room. (11) I told Harvey to make me a sandwich, and off it went. (12) Harvey knew all the actors and even told me how the movie was made. (13) Harvey is one smart cookie. 1 What is the correct way to write sentence 4? A Harvey cleaned my room. Read us an adventure story, and told us a funny joke. B Cleaned my room in five minutes flat and read us an adventure story about a space explorer, and told us a funny joke. C Harvey cleaned my room in five minutes flat, read us an adventure story about a space explorer, and told us a funny joke. D Sentence 4 is written correctly. Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online

Test Talk: We Try It Together Day 3 Doug wrote a story about a great present he got. Read his paper and look for ways she should revise/edit it.    (1) I got the best birthday present ever for my tenth birthday. (2) It’s a Special Edition Elixir Robot, built especially for kids aged eight to ten. (3) I named the robot Harvey, and I invited all my friends over to show what it could do. (4) Harvey cleaned my room in five minutes flat read us an adventure story about a space explorer, and told us a funny joke. (5) After that, we went outside, and Harvey taught us some soccer moves. (6) My friends’ mouths opened wide, and I said, “If you’re nice to me, I’ll let you play with the robot.” (7) They all left after that. (8) After school, I couldn’t wait to get home and turn on Harvey. (9) It helped me with homework and explained what the teacher left out. (10) Harvey played board games with me, watched a movie, and helped clean my room. (11) I told Harvey to make me a sandwich, and off it went. (12) Harvey knew all the actors and even told me how the movie was made. (13) Harvey is one smart cookie. 1 What change needs to be made in sentence 10? A Change watched to watches B Delete the comma after me C Change and to but D Sentence 10 is written correctly. Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online

Day 4 Commas Commas in a Series Editing Invitation

Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online Test Talk: I Try It! Day 4 Doug wrote a story about a great present he got. Read his paper and look for ways she should revise/edit it. (14) After a week or so I was only playing with Harvey. (15) My friends stopped calling texting, and stopping by the house. (16) I didn’t care, because Harvey was the best playmate ever, and I started thinking of him as a person—as a he, not an it. (17) He always agreed with me helped me with things, and said I was the best kid in seven states. (18) Who wouldn’t love that? (19) Then one day after school, I went up to my room to find Harvey, and noticed he was missing. (20) Standing where he usually stood was a brand new Crimson Flyer Bicycle. (21) I ran downstairs screaming “Where’s Harvey?” (22) Mom paused from making bread and said, “Your father and I have discussed Harvey and we think it is unhealthy for you to play only with a robot. (23) We exchanged it for a bicycle, and we hope you’ll start playing more with your friends again.” (24) I gulped, but I knew she was right. (25) I was a boy, not a robot, and I needed human friends. (26) I took my Crimson Flyer Bicycle and rode it to the park. (27) Somewhere there would be a living, breathing fun friend for me. 1 What is the correct way to write sentence 15? A Insert comma after calling B Insert and after calling C Delete comma after texting D Change and to so Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online

Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online Test Talk: I Try It! Day 4 Doug wrote a story about a great present he got. Read his paper and look for ways she should revise/edit it. (14) After a week or so I was only playing with Harvey. (15) My friends stopped calling texting, and stopping by the house. (16) I didn’t care, because Harvey was the best playmate ever, and I started thinking of him as a person—as a he, not an it. (17) He always agreed with me helped me with things, and said I was the best kid in seven states. (18) Who wouldn’t love that? (19) Then one day after school, I went up to my room to find Harvey, and noticed he was missing. (20) Standing where he usually stood was a brand new Crimson Flyer Bicycle. (21) I ran downstairs screaming “Where’s Harvey?” (22) Mom paused from making bread and said, “Your father and I have discussed Harvey and we think it is unhealthy for you to play only with a robot. (23) We exchanged it for a bicycle, and we hope you’ll start playing more with your friends again.” (24) I gulped, but I knew she was right. (25) I was a boy, not a robot, and I needed human friends. (26) I took my Crimson Flyer Bicycle and rode it to the park. (27) Somewhere there would be a living, breathing fun friend for me. 2 How could sentence 17 be changed? A Delete and B Insert comma after He C Delete comma after things D Insert comma after me Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online 13

Test Talk: I Try It! Day 4 Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online Doug wrote a story about a great present he got. Read his paper and look for ways she should revise/edit it. (14) After a week or so I was only playing with Harvey. (15) My friends stopped calling texting, and stopping by the house. (16) I didn’t care, because Harvey was the best playmate ever, and I started thinking of him as a person—as a he, not an it. (17) He always agreed with me helped me with things, and said I was the best kid in seven states. (18) Who wouldn’t love that? (19) Then one day after school, I went up to my room to find Harvey, and noticed he was missing. (20) Standing where he usually stood was a brand new Crimson Flyer Bicycle. (21) I ran downstairs screaming “Where’s Harvey?” (22) Mom paused from making bread and said, “Your father and I have discussed Harvey and we think it is unhealthy for you to play only with a robot. (23) We exchanged it for a bicycle, and we hope you’ll start playing more with your friends again.” (24) I gulped, but I knew she was right. (25) I was a boy, not a robot, and I needed human friends. (26) I took my Crimson Flyer Bicycle and rode it to the park. (27) Somewhere there would be a living, breathing fun friend for me. 3 What change if any is needed in sentence 27? A Insert comma after Somewhere B Delete comma after living C Insert comma before fun D Make no change Selection from: Measuring Up Live Online