Characters and Verbs Week 5.1

Lesson Objectives Discuss balance between synthesis and summary for draft 1.2 Connect subjects to characters, and verbs to actions Revise for strong verbs Avoid passive voice Review Brief Assignment Four

Draft 1.2: Balance Read the “Word Size” paragraph on page 614. What does the author emphasize in this paragraph? What is the balance between synthesis and summary? How does this balance highlight the literature more than the topic?

Subjects-Characters, Verbs-Actions The sentence’s subject is its main character. Verbs express specific action. Once upon a time, Little Red Riding Hood was walking through the woods, when the Wolf jumped out from behind a tree and frightened her. Research on environmental justice movements wrestle with questions concerning particular and universal issues.

Subject-Characters, Verbs-Actions Nominalization: A noun derived from a verb or adjective. Lincoln’s hope was for the preservation of the Union without war, but the South’s attack on Fort Sumter made war an inevitability. Hope Preservation Preserve Attack Inevitability Inevitable

Nominalization Lincoln hoped to preserve the Union without war, but when the South attacked Fort Sumter, war became inevitable. Have the changes improved the sentence? 1.a The evocation of the “lawless” West recalls cultural memory. 1.b The “lawless” West evokes cultural memory. Has the change improved the sentence?

Recap for S-C, V-A Make main characters subjects. Make important actions verb. Consider switching nominalizations back into verbs and adjectives. Helps with concision. Strengthens verbs.

Revision Exercise Circle “common” verbs. Be, Seem, Have, Do Bracket nominalized verbs and adjectives. What are you finding in your work?

Passive Voice The passive voice occurs when “a past participle is preceded by a form of be” (First-Year 171). The money was lost by me. I lost the money. The team was frustrated by the current losing streak. How to change? Questions to Consider (First-Year 172)

Brief Assignment Four Format Designate the following four sections: Thesis Statement Original Passage: It should be six to eight sentences from a body paragraph. Revised Passage: Revisions should consider concision, summary-synthesis balance, and readers’ comments. Evaluative Paragraph: It must address how revisions impact audience, purpose, and meaning.

Homework: Sections .001 and .008 Wednesday, July 2 Submit BA 4 in Raider Writer Wednesday, July 9 First-Year, Chapter 9