Essay Writing Success Criteria

Thesis Statement Level 3: The 1920s did Roar The 1920s was a roaring decade The 1920s did not roar Level 4: The 1920s were an era of many advantages and progress in Canada The 1920s were very prosperous times in Canada The 1920s was an important and prosperous decade for Canadians

What is the Success Criteria for Thesis Statements? Be specific about the topic Definite opinion Words that reflect opinion States the What and Why you are arguing that point Formal language

Subtopics Level 3: minorities, prohibition, women Economy, women, entertainment New inventions, discovery of insulin, prohibition Level 4: improvement in women’s rights, growth of the economy, enhancements in Canadian politics Economic growth, increasing independence from Britain, enhanced entertainment industry Numerous inventions forwarded the quality of life in Canada, prohibition raised awareness about drinking, women’s movement increased the rights of women

What is the success criteria for subtopics? Elaborate on the purpose of the subpoint Must be specific and support thesis Helps answer the “so what”

Topic Sentences Level 3: Crime rates rose in the 20s Prohibition was quite important The 20s was a great time for new innovations Level 4: The inventions of the 20s were a large factor in the success of the decade Throughout the 1920s the economy prospered significantly due to many new inventions The economy in Canada boomed due to new inventions which made the 1920s prosperous

What is the success criteria for Topic Sentences? Relate back to thesis (What, Why, How) Formal tone Expand diction Roadmap to your paragraph

Points Level 3: In the 1920s women were given the right to vote Canada became trade partners with the US The discovery of new medicine, insulin Level 4 The discovery of insulin was a factor that contributed to the roaring 20s New major industries developed in the 1920s, such as the radio and automobiles industries The invention of the battery-less radio helped the economy in the 1920s

What is the success criteria for Points Prove your subtopic Describe vs just stating Incorporating historical significance Links to topic (relevant proof)

Evidence Level 3: Ted Rogers invented the radio in the early 1920s They were Canada's most successful basketball team at the time Canadians used radios to entertain guests at parties and events and elevate their social status Level 4: In 1929, a little over 2/3s of Canada’s imports were from the USA, The exports were also high at 40% to the USA The Balfour Declaration of 1926 stated that Britain, Canada and other dominations were independent, self- governing countries having equal status with Britain In 1920 the Dominion Elections Act of 1900 that prevented women from voting or holding office was amended giving women the equal right to vote

What is the success criteria for Evidence? Use statistics/Quotations Use specific details such as names, issues, legalities etc Facts Don’t make it sound like a topic sentence

Analysis Level 3: This helped Canadians elevate their social statuses and also helped our economy Because of Banting and Best’s discovery people around the world could be saved This was a huge movement for women’s suffrage and rights and was the first step to women becoming “persons” in society Level 4: The persons case had a ripple effect that led to the constitution being changed again in 1980. Therefore Canadians began to see the constitution as their own, something they could alter American investment created many new jobs and products to become available as American-run branch plants and businesses started cropping up These popular forms of music and art brought people out to join in the community, which meant the entertainment industry boomed and in turn made the entire economy better as more people spent money on different forms of entertainment.

What is the success criteria for Analysis? Describes how/why it connects to your essay (your side of the argument) Outlines the significance of the point and how it is relevant to your thesis

Concluding Sentences Level 3: Prohibition was a major event effecting everyone in the 1920s Inventions helped the Canadian economy by creating new jobs Jazz culture helped people evolve socially and culturally Level 4: The boom in industry, increased wages, and American Investment all fuelled the “roar” of the 20s The economical growth of the 20s was phenomenal because of the introduction of buying on credit, the stock market, and a burst of new inventions and innovations As such, the women’s right movement in the 1920s created prosperous and lasting change

What is the success criteria for Concluding Sentences? State the HOW affect is established Summary of points you discussed in your paragraph Go back to your thesis and your side of the argument