Points to Ponder Process Analysis i never think at all when i write nobody can do two things at the same time and do them both well ~Don Marquis, Archy's Life of Mehitabel, 1933 Points to Ponder

Minimum Requirements: V – if less than 8 vocab S – if missing some believe W – if missing your warning, caution OR attention H – if you forgot to highlight something: vocab, quotes, paraphrases, some believe, warning, skills/equipment SE – If you did not include 2 skills and/or equipment WC – If you are missing your works cited entry (it can be handwritten on the back) SP – If the whole paper (including the heading information) isn’t single spaced ES – If you didn’t put the extra space between paragraphs L – If it isn’t one full page F – if you are missing any major formatting elements (heading, title, or indenting paragraphs) Q – If you are missing one or both of your quotes P – If you are missing your paraphrase T- Not typed NP – if you don’t have a draft at all. 

Process Analysis You are going to be asked a series of questions – you can answer these directly on the back of your rough draft, or you can identify how/where you do this in your paper. How you show this is up to you!

1. Did the writer (you) consistently address the reader? Process Analysis 1. Did the writer (you) consistently address the reader?

Process Analysis 2. How did the writer get readers involved in reading about a process they might not have been interested in? In other words, how did you woo the reader and draw him/her in to your writing?

Process Analysis 3. Did any of the elements of the process stand out from the others or did they all feel the same? (We want each of the steps to feel like they were given the same amount of attention and importance! They should be balanced!)

Process Analysis 4. How are the paragraphs connected? Would you have used other transitions between ideas? Specifically, look at the final sentence of each of your body paragraphs – they should have summations and transitions. Sum up that paragraph and then transition into the next idea.

(There is a transition document on our web page under the process analysis documents – I think it will help! I would print it out! It might even help with your midterm!)

5. Do you think the essay ever becomes too simple-minded? Process Analysis 5. Do you think the essay ever becomes too simple-minded? (Sometimes this paper can get a feeling of being way too informal and the steps too simple-minded – so try to find that happy medium that is appropriate to your task!)

A Clear and Limiting Title is Needed Make the title promise exactly what the process will deliver! But it CANNOT be: How to Be Happy (or whatever your emotion is!)

So, are the details clear enough? Are they detailed? Double check! Informed Content You must know the procedure down to the smallest detail. Unless you have performed the task successfully, don't try to write instructions for it. So, are the details clear enough? Are they detailed? Double check!

Logically Ordered Steps Good procedures divide the process into steps; they also guide readers through the steps in order, to reduce the likelihood of mistakes. Do you address some mistakes that could be made? Put an M in the margin next to at least one place where you share a mistake might be made.

Remember it is important to give enough background so readers understand why they should follow your instructions. People who know why they are doing something usually do a better job than those who don't. Did you give enough background and build your credibility?

Did you provide examples that will show readers how to follow the procedure correctly?

That Pesky Conclusion Summarize (don’t restate)major steps in a long and complex procedure to help readers review performance Describe results of process Offer follow up advice about what could be done next or refer reader to further sources of documentation Give troubleshooting advice in case something goes wrong.

Think about the details . . . Did you stack? Does your pd match your works cited: “blah blah blah” (“How to Be Grumpy”). Or “blah blah blah” (Smith). Are commas tucked inside quotation marks: “blah,” not “blah”,

Think about the details . . . Now, for your quotes – why are you quoting them? What are they offering? When language is especially vivid or expressive When exact wording is needed for technical accuracy When the words of an important authority lend weight to an argument Highlighting necessary bias or opposite opinions. If they are not purposeful – change them! In the margin put which of the reasons you are using as you weave in your chosen quote!

Think about the details . . . Are there 2 commentaries between your quotes and paraphrase? (Do you have two sentences of your own writing between any quotes/paraphrases? Are all your topic sentences your words? No quotes or paraphrases should be there. Is your attention getter amazing????????? Think about painting a picture of what the end result will be if they learn how to truly be . . .

Think about the details . . . Is your conclusion strong? Did you vary your sentence structure? Did you weave your quotes in? Don’t have them just hanging out! Is your voice consistent? Did you show and not just tell?

Remember, description is still very important! Focus on those strong images! Choose 8 words that can be made stronger – more vibrant. Highlight those words to work on later.

Think about the details . . . Do your topic sentences for the body paragraphs identify the step for that part of the process (Are all your numbers written out? Remember that all numbers less than one hundred must be written out – three NOT 3)

Your Works Cited Page For your final draft your works cited page does need to be complete and typed and on its own page. Be sure that you have a proper entry. If you have problems – just review your student style handbook, google Purdue OWL MLA Formatting, or see me! 

How to Cite a Web Page Editor, author, or compiler name (if available). Name of Site. Version number. Name of institution/organization affiliated with the site (sponsor or publisher), date of resource creation (if available). Medium of publication. Date of access. The Purdue OWL Family of Sites. The Writing Lab and OWL at Purdue and Purdue U, 2008. Web. 23 Apr. 2011.

A few details from your prewriting . . . Highlight where you establish your credibility. Put a squiggle over where you identify why it is important that people learn how to be your emotion – this should not just be in your thesis! Highlight (in a different color) where you identify how long the process takes.

One more change for your final draft format? Your final draft will be Buzzfeed style . . . You will have a title, and then underneath it a tag line – your tag line will be directly under your title, still centered, and should be two sentences!

You will number your steps You will number your steps. Choose an image for each of your body paragraphs. And in your paragraph below the image you will want to highlight key terms and ideas! Think about what you want to stand out! You don’t have to cite your image, but just include the link to where you found the image – if it is a picture you took just write: Photo Credit: Your Name

Title Tag Line Introduction

Please do the following on the back of one of your rough draft pages! The last step . . . Please do the following on the back of one of your rough draft pages! Tell me three strengths to what you have written so far. Tell me three things that you still need to do before you turn this in to me. Give me a score for your current Content, Organization, Expression, and Mechanics and Usage. Score should be 1-10 (10 being highest) explain why you gave the score you did and reference your rubric. (Your explanation should be 2-3 sentences long.) (If you can’t find your rubric there is one in our documents online!)

Your final draft is not due until Friday, October 17th! You will only turn in an electronic copy to turnitin!

For your final draft: Highlight/label vocabulary Highlight/label quotes Highlight/label your paraphrase Highlight/label Some Believe Highlight/label Warning/Caution/Attention Highlight/label your 2 skills/equipment