Communication Skills

Phone conversation Hello, I sent in my transcripts. I want to know if you have received them. What is wrong with this conversation? What can be changed?

Hello, my name is ________. Is this the Admission’s Office? I come from International School of Arts and Science in Dubai. My ID # is 2012001448. I sent in my transcripts. I need to check if you have received them. Can you refer me to the person in charge please.

Email communication Hello. I applied to your university and sent in my documents. I also sent my new sat scores 3 days ago and I want to check if you received them. Thank you. What is wrong with this email? What should be added to it? How can we make it better?

To whom it may concern, My name is _________. I am an applicant for the fall 2012 term. My ID # is 201201448. I have handed in all my documents. I just want to make sure that you received my new SAT scores. I have sent them 3 days ago. I would kindly appreciate it if you could confirm as soon as you receive them. Thank you.

University visit communication : I want to know what the requirements are. What sounds wrong with this question? When you attend a university visit, you should be aware of the requirements of this university. We ask you to attend the visit based on your choices for universities. You should do the necessary research before attending to the visit itself. Keep in mind that by the end of junior year, you should have a clear list of where you might be going, so doing your research should be done now.