Developing a Thesis
Original Thesis Thesis: The treatment of racism in movies reflects the racism in society at the time. Problem: Not too interesting. Seems self-evident
Be more Specific Revised Thesis: As racism changed over time in America, racism within the justice system in movies changed with it. Still a bit vague… Does changed mean increased or decreased?
More Specific and Detailed To Kill a Mockingbird A Soldier’s Story 12 Angry Men Philadelphia Okay….what do these movies have in common? what’s different? okay…all trials…the first three deal with racism… the last discrimination
Try Broadening Discrimination What about women? Working Girl…did that have a trial in it? Other movies? Discrimination is more broad than racism.
Take Stock I could do more research Based on what I know now, let’s try to formulate a new thesis Key terms - discrimination, courtroom dramas, justice
New Thesis Hollywood has used courtroom dramas to model the ideal of equal justice for all as a means of overcoming discrimination.
Compare Original Thesis: The treatment of racism in movies reflects the racism in society at the time. More Developed Thesis: Hollywood courtroom dramas model the ideal of equal justice for all as a means of overcoming discrimination. Notice how I’ve eliminated some of the weaker words in the more developed thesis.