Creating a Strong Thesis for the Narrative Essay Practice and Identification

Beauty is only skin deep. Too Broad: Beauty is only skin deep. What information is missing from this thesis?

Specific: It was during this transitional point in my life that my father began to teach me a valuable and significant lesson regarding beauty and the power of words. What context was given here that is important? Why is this a strong thesis?

What information is missing? Why is this too broad of a thesis? A best friend is good to have. What information is missing? Why is this too broad of a thesis?

Narrowed: It was my second year in Elementary School, when Sherry took the blame for the mess we made in the hall, that I realized best friends are necessary to make it through life. What context was given here that is important? Why is this a strong thesis?

Too Broad: Be careful what you say. OR Sticks and stones may break your bones, but words will never hurt you.

Narrowed: I know I have a big mouth; I learned the hard way that words have the power to build people up and also to slam people down.

Try your own! Two Wrongs don’t make a right. When life gives you lemons, make lemonade. Try your own!