Controversial Issues Peer Edit

Minimum Requirements: D – if the paper isn’t double spaced WC – if you are missing your Works Cited page S – if you are missing one or more sources F – if you are missing any major formatting elements (heading, header, title) T- Not typed NP – if you don’t have a draft at all.  V – if less than 20 vocab PD – if less than 12 PD WCL – if you didn’t label your works cited for the type of source PL – if your paragraph lengths do not meet the minimum (5-7 for intro and conclusion, 7-10 for body paragraphs) H – if you forgot to highlight your PD or your vocab

Solution 1 – Band Aid Solution Solution 2 – Big Solution Conclusion Use a highlighter to break apart your paper by the sections you are covering! Introduction History Extent Repercussion Solution 1 – Band Aid Solution Solution 2 – Big Solution Conclusion HISTORY EXTENT

Based on the number of people at your table you will assign people to different sections of the paper: Introduction & Conclusion History Extent Repercussion Solution 1 – Band Aid Solution & Solution 2 – Big Solution

Initial on the opposite side of the labeled margin. During your peer edit you will only review your paragraph(s) and do the following: Initial on the opposite side of the labeled margin. Mark directly on the paper any mistakes or corrections or questions – just like a normal peer edit. On the notecard record the following: 2 strengths (+) 2 items to consider ( )

The Introduction Is the attention getter vibrant? Will it truly draw in the reader? Is there a clear statement of the problem? Check your thesis – be sure it is the last sentence (or two) of the intro paragraph. Is the intro strong enough to capture the audience’s attention? Is there a BRIEF background on the topic? Do you feel as though you know a smidge about what you will be reading about? Has the author created an interest for you in this topic? Are you worried it could destroy the world? Is there a smooth transition into the thesis? Is there not too much “story” or narrative in the introduction? Are you (as the reader) feeling a level of concern that you do need to know more about this so that you can help to solve this problem?

The Body Paragraphs History of the Problem - Do you know all that you need to know about the problem? Is the focus on the problem at hand? Read the thesis just to be sure! Is the history contained within just one paragraph? Do you feel you need to know anything else? If so, make a note of that!

Extent of the Problem The Body Paragraphs (the immediate issues at hand) – Do we know who is directly affected? Do we know how bad it really is? Is the extent “bad” enough to create concern? Is there a connection to why other teens would care about this problem?

The Body Paragraphs Repercussions (the snowball effect) – Is it clear what will happen in the future if the problem is not solved? Are the repercussions clearly addressing a snow ball effect? Is a dire need for this “problem” to be solved set forward?

The Body Paragraphs Future Solutions – Are there two paragraphs delineated for the solutions? Is the first paragraph a smaller, immediate “band aid” to the solution? Could you (as the reader) take part in the band aid solution? Is the second solution paragraph clearly a bigger, stronger solution that could potentially make a great change? Are there any holes or faulty logic within the solutions? Do you need to know more? Less?

The Conclusion Do you get a feeling of what the thesis was? (It doesn’t have to be restated, but we need to come back to the main ideas of the problem and the big picture solution.) Does the conclusion of the essay have a sense of completeness? Do you feel like this problem is real and you must do something to help be a part of the solution? Does the conclusion end with a strong final sentence without being too dramatic?

Quick Concerns: Match your PD Don’t stack quotes & paraphrases! You need at least two sentences of commentary between. Let your topic sentence do its job! No quotes or paraphrases as topic sentences!

Final Thoughts: List on the back Three things you did well Three things you have left to do If you had to assign yourself an overall holistic score what would you give yourself and why – give the number (83) and then explain in four to six sentences.