Painted Faces Close Reading Handout Responses are mostly referring to Golding’s diction. REMINDER: Diction is word choice that has connotative meaning. What is important about recognizing diction? Diction informs the reader: Tone (writer’s attitude) Characterization, mood, and/or theme

Tone – the writer’s attitude toward the subject Revealed through literary devices and rhetorical strategies Diction (word choice with connotative meaning) Detail (facts without interpretive meaning of the words) Syntax (sentence structure) Contrast (opposites) Imagery (sensory details often with diction to create a scene) Figurative language (simile, metaphor, personification) Evidence comes from the text itself. Consider the two tones on your paper. What words and/or phrases support the tones? What other devices, if any, reveal the tones?

Examples of Words that reveal tone Planned New face His breathing troubled the mirror Mask Sinewy Bloodthirsty snarling Shame and self-consciousness What do these examples suggest?

Incorporating Quotes into Your Sentence Use ONLY the KEY words. Always keep in mind your purpose. Sample: Possible tones: eerie, fearful, disturbing Displeased with his first attempt to conceal his face, Jack meticulously “plan[s] his new face,” calculating each mark and color so as to create a look with which he is satisfied.

Choose one quote. Incorporate it into an example sentence.

Connect the example to the thesis. Golding uses diction to create an eerie tone, signifying Jack’s immersion into savagery. Displeased with his first attempt to conceal his appearance, Jack meticulously “plan[s] his new face,” calculating each mark and color so as to create a look with which he is satisfied. Golding’s seemingly simple words stress the deliberation behind each motion Jack makes to recreate his image to his own specifications. The intensity mounts with each new movement that brings Jack closer to his goal. Golding’s diction suggests not only Jack’s intent to obscure his identity and, ultimately, reject any bond to civilization, but also Golding’s unnerving response to the possibility that such a situation would ever arise. … (More examples are needed.)

Journal #2 – Painted Faces In a journal entry discuss how William Golding uses diction to present the dominant tone or two different but complimentary tones in the close reading passage from chapter four of Lord of the Flies. Reminders: Focus on only ONE literary device. Write a clear, specific thesis. Practice writing example sentences and connecting those examples to your thesis.

From Journal Entry to Essay Common beginner’s writing prompt from close reading: Identify the dominant tone, or two different but complimentary tones, in the assigned passage and discuss the writer’s use of diction to present the tone(s). Brainstorm examples of diction. How does each example show tone? Establish your thesis. Organize the essay. The thesis must identify the subject and include the following: Subject (use of diction in passage on pages 63 and 64 in William Golding’s novel Lord of the Flies) Tone (your chosen tone or tones) Purpose (what you conclude is the writer’s purpose)

BP diction – fear – Jack creates the mask. THESIS SENTENCE: In chapter four of Lord of the Flies, William Golding uses diction to create a tone of fear, signifying Jack’s immersion into savagery. Body Paragraphs: BP diction – fear – Jack creates the mask. TS – Subject and opinion: Tell what this paragraph will prove. Examples with discussion Closure BP diction fear – the horror within the boys TRANSITION to the second bp. Repeat the above pattern Concluding Paragraph: So what? Through ___ Golding ______. OR (possibly both) Through _________ the reader ______.

Review your journal entry. Is your thesis statement clear and specific? Does it address the prompt? How would you divide your ideas into two distinct bp’s?

It’s Your Turn… Write a thesis statement. Organize your ideas, planning for a two body paragraph essay. Write a topic sentence for each body paragraph. Samples: THESIS SENTENCE: In chapter four of Lord of the Flies, William Golding uses diction to create a tone of fear, signifying Jack’s immersion into savagery. TOPIC SENTENCE: Golding uses words that illustrate Jack as a shrewd, hostile figure, generating dread in the reader. TOPIC SENTENCE: The disturbing effect of Jack’s actions is heightened through Golding’s choice of words as the new form rises and faces the boys.