Coherence What are transitions? Transitions within a paragraph create internal coherence Transitions between paragraphs create external coherence. Transitions within paragraphs improve the flow of the writing and help readers understand when events happened Transitions between paragraphs help readers track the passage of time from the beginning to the end.

Coherence, pg. 33 Coherence is the clear and orderly presentation of ideas in a paragraph or essay. (Using transition words) Internal coherence refers to coherence (using transitions) within a paragraph. External coherence refers to coherence (using transitions) between the paragraphs and relates to the entire essay.

internal coherence external coherence In the beginning of the year, I wasn’t a good basketball player. I had to prove myself to the coach and the other players. In fact, I struggled to keep up, but I continued to practice, and my game improved. Toward the end of the year, I was asked to start in an important game. At first, I was nervous. After I made a couple of goals, I began to enjoy myself. Now, I can see how my hard work has paid off. I am a good basketball player after all.

Tie it together: revising the ending Lesson 1.9 (P. 42) Tie it together: revising the ending

Think about it… What do you enjoy in a narrative ending? In other words, what do you enjoy about a story’s ending? In a book? In a movie?

Narrative Endings, pg. 42 “Great is the art of beginning, but greater is the art of ending.” ~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow What makes a great ending to a story (narrative)?

Tie It Together: Revising the Ending Review today’s Learning Targets (pg.42) Analyze and evaluate narrative endings. Apply an understanding of the purpose of the ending by revising a narrative ending.

Let’s Revisit & Examine Effective Endings, pg.42 Text Length of Ending Summarize the Ending Author’s Purpose in Using This Ending “The Scholarship Jacket” pg. 17 Last 5 paragraphs (#’s 33-37) “Bad Boy” pg. 27-28 Last 4 paragraphs (#’s 11 - 14) “Why Couldn’t I Have Been Named Ashley?” pg. 37 Last 2 paragraphs (#’s 7 – 8) Each table group: Choose one of the stories we have read and re-read the ending. Working as a group, complete the next two boxes of this chart for that story only. Be prepared to share with the class. Be sure to include text evidence and details that support your group’s ideas about the author’s purpose for the ending

Let’s Revisit & Examine Effective Endings, pg.42 Text Length of Ending Summarize the Ending Author’s Purpose in Using This Ending “The Scholarship Jacket” pg. 17 Last 5 paragraphs (#’s 33-37) “Bad Boy” pg. 27 Last 4 paragraphs (#’s 10 - 13) “Why Couldn’t I Have Been Named Ashley?” pg. 37 Last 2 paragraphs (#’s 7 – 8) Tells her grandfather about the principal’s decision about the jacket and describes her grandfather’s silent reaction To show that Grandpa was right to refuse to pay for the jacket, and they both knew it To show how much he changed with his discovery of his love of reading Discusses how much his grades and behavior changed after his experiences with two teachers. States her full name twice and the meaning of her name To show a new sense of pride about her name and its significance

Revising Your Narrative Ending, pg. 43 Think about how each writer incorporated a reflection in order to bring the narrative to a meaningful and satisfying close. Use the following questions to help generate ideas for the reflective ending for your narrative. What did I learn from the experience? Why does this matter? Can I revisit a concept or idea from my lead or an image in the middle to create coherence? Effective Writers Reflect: Describe how you have changed your ending. How did this change make your ending more effective for your reader?

To help you get started revising your ending, consider this… Select your favorite ending from the texts we reread today. Then, use the structure of the ending as a mentor text to guide you as you create your own reflective ending for your narrative.

Writing Groups Share your revisions with others in your table group Explain how you improved your ending Give each group member feedback – remember to be positive Then, read your paper quietly out loud to yourself. As you read, edit your paper accordingly.

Reflecting on the changes to your ending, pg. 43 Effective Writers Reflect: Describe how you have changed your ending. How did this change make your ending more effective for your reader?