Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Featuring Suzanne Collins’ novel Catching Fire from her adolescent literature series, The Hunger Games

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Jones 1 Joe Jones Mr. Braam CCR English 10, Bell 1 Ind. Novel Response #1 Nov. 6, 2015 Response #1 for Independent Novel (or appropriate title) In the novel Catching Fire, author Suzanne Collins builds tension by using cliffhanger endings to her chapters. For example, at the end of Chapter 19, Katniss goes to check on Peeta after her partner was zapped by a force field. The chapter ends with “I press my ear against his chest, to the spot where I always rest my head, where I know I will hear the strong and steady beat of his heart. Instead, I find silence” (Collins 279). By saying that Katniss expects to hear the heartbeat that she always hears, then saying she hears nothing, Collins makes readers want to turn the page quickly to relieve the tension caused by wanting to know whether or not Peeta survives. Another example comes at the end of Chapter 20, when a seemingly innocent fog starts sliding into the area where Katniss and her allies are sleeping. The chapter ends with “The progression of the front line [of the fog] is too uniform to be natural. And if it is not natural ... . A sickening sweet This text – of which you have a copy in front of you – is an example of how to write a developed paragraph response to a prompt, while also using both MLA formatting and MLA in-text citations

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Joe Jones Mr. Braam CCR English 10, Bell 1 Ind. Novel Response #1 Nov. 6, 2015 Response #1 for Independent Novel (or appropriate title) First, remember that all text in your response needs to be in MLA format. That includes things such as: Double-spacing Times New Roman font 12-point type 1-inch margins AND DON’T FORGET THE HEADER AT THE TOP OF THE PAGE!!!

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example That mandatory header includes: The writer’s name The teacher’s name Name of the class and bell # Type of assignment And date the work is handed in Joe Jones Mr. Braam CCR English 10, Bell 1 Ind. Novel Response #1 Nov. 6, 2015

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Jones 1 The header (continued) And don’t forget your last name and page number at the top right of the page In Microsoft Word, use the “Insert Page Number” function and add the name

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example The title Note that the title below is centered Note that the title is the same font and point size as the rest of the text Response #1 for Independent Novel (or appropriate title) In the novel Catching Fire, author Suzanne Collins builds tension by using cliffhanger endings to her chapters. (In other words, the title is not underlined or italicized. It also is not bolder, or larger than anything else that is on the page)

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the text begins double-spaced from the title The text Response #1 for Independent Novel (or appropriate title) In the novel Catching Fire, author Suzanne Collins builds tension by using cliffhanger endings to her chapters. Note that the text is indented 5 spaces

“How does the author build tension in the book?” Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the prompt, in this case, asks about the author and the book. Responding to the Prompt Let’s say that you are responding to a prompt that asks: “How does the author build tension in the book?” Note that it also asks you to offer an opinion about how tension is built in the book

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the first sentence is my topic, or the thesis/claim statement. This your opinion or commentary The text Response #1 for Independent Novel (or appropriate title) In the novel Catching Fire, author Suzanne Collins builds tension by using cliffhanger endings to her chapters. It also tells us the name of the book and the author It rephrases the question “How does the author build tension?” Then it tells us exactly the method she utilizes to build tension … “using cliffhanger endings”

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example The topic sentence/ claim is then followed by an example from the book Note that a transitional word or phrase is used For example, at the end of Chapter 19, Katniss goes to check on Peeta after her partner was zapped by a force field. The chapter ends with “I press my ear against his chest, to the spot where I always rest my head, where I know I will hear the strong and steady beat of his heart. Instead, I find silence” (Collins 279). The example includes a quote that provides evidence for the claim about the topic … about how tension is built The in-text citation then gives the author’s last name and the page number that the quote was on in the book

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note carefully (and remember!!!) the following punctuation rules for MLA in-text citations Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example ... Instead, I find silence” (Collins 279). Note that the quote ends with only a quote mark … and no period The author’s last name and the page number have no punctuation at all between them, and are surrounded by parentheses TEACHER NOTE: This is one of the rare, rare moments when a period or comma does NOT go inside the quote mark The final punctuation (the period, in this case) comes after the closing parenthesis

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Then the citation is followed by an explanation of the evidence from the book. Remember, this is also what is called “developed commentary” (Collins 279). By saying that Katniss expects to hear the heartbeat that she always hears, then saying she hears nothing, Collins makes readers want to turn the page quickly to relieve the tension caused by wanting to know whether or not Peeta survives. What you are doing here is saying why your evidence that you quote from the text supports your claim … or, in this case, explaining how Collins built tension with a specific cliffhanger chapter ending! In this case, the tension is caused by readers wanting to discover whether or not Peeta survives … but then the chapter ends

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Then the evidence is followed by a second example from the book about building tension. Note the transition “Another example …” … whether or not Peeta survives. Another example comes at the end of Chapter 20, when a seemingly innocent fog starts sliding into the area where Katniss and her allies are sleeping. That alerts readers to the fact that you have a second piece of evidence on the way.

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the new textual evidence from the book also has quote marks around it … are sleeping. The chapter ends with “The progression of the front line [of the fog] is too uniform to be natural. And if it is not natural ... . A sickening sweet odor begins to invade my nostrils and I reach for the others, shouting for them to wake up. In the few seconds it takes to rouse them, I begin to blister” (Collins 297). Note that the new quoted evidence also is an example of how the author built tension … by saying that Katniss started to blister as the chapter ended

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the quote is again followed by no period and then a final quote mark … are sleeping. The chapter ends with “The progression of the front line [of the fog] is too uniform to be natural. And if it is not natural ... . A sickening sweet odor begins to invade my nostrils and I reach for the others, shouting for them to wake up. In the few seconds it takes to rouse them, I begin to blister” (Collins 297). Note that the quote is again followed by an in-text citation

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Note that the quote and the in-text citation are again followed by an explanation … … begin to blister” (Collins 297). Once again, by leaving Katniss and her friends in danger and their fate unknown, Collins makes readers feel the increased tension, pulling them further into the book to find out the results. … that details how the quoted evidence shows that Collins built tension with another cliffhanger chapter ending. Again, this is called “developed commentary,” because it is explaining how your evidence backs up your opinion

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Then, at the end, there is a conclusion that ties the evidence back to the topic sentence/ claim … out the results. These are just two examples of how Collins masterfully uses cliffhanger endings to build tension, both in her book Catching Fire and in the readers’ minds. Note that your conclusion should rephrase (not merely repeat verbatim) the claim, drawing your response to a satisfactory – and complete – close We included the author’s name, the name of the book, and rephrased the original claim … that “Collins masterfully used cliffhanger endings to build tension”

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Major Points to Remember: Type your responses Use MLA formatting (double-spacing, font, point sizes, etc.) Have a topic sentence/claim expressing your opinion that ALSO incorporates the original prompt (and probably the name of the book and the author’s name, too)

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Major Points to Remember: 4. Follow the topic sentence/claim with an example from the book, plus a quote from the text provided as evidence that supports your original claim 5. Remember to use an in-text citation at the end of the quote, using the proper format and punctuation (author last name and page #)

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Major Points to Remember: 6. Next, explain how the quoted evidence backs up your original topic sentence/claim 7. Make sure you have the correct number of requested examples within your response (ADDED NOTE: If no specific number of examples is requested in the prompt, my suggestion is to find two examples at minimum)

Building Better Responses/ MLA In-Text Citations The Example Major Points to Remember: 8. Make sure that for every quoted example from the text that you offer as support, that you also remember to use another in-text citation 9. End your response with a concluding sentence that refers back to the topic sentence/claim and to the cited evidence that you have provided from the text

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Now, let’s practice!!!! Read the following excerpt: THE TEXT (from page 25 of John Steinbeck’s Of Mice and Men) (Curley’s) eyes passed over the new men and he stopped. He glanced coldly at George and then at Lennie. His arms gradually bent at the elbows and his hands closed into fists. He stiffened and went into a slight crouch. His glance was at once calculating and pugnacious. Lennie squirmed under the look and shifted his feet nervously. Curley stepped gingerly close to him. “You the new guys the old man was waitin’ for?” PROMPT: What kind of attitude did Curley have toward George and Lennie when they all first met in the bunkhouse? What inferences from the text did you make to determine your opinion?