Writing Errors

No symbols or small numbers!! It is summer & there is a heat wave. There were 4 brothers. Walt Master is a responsible boy of the age 14.

Pronoun over-use They wanted their land for the gold. It turns out their land was miles deep in gold. They said if we gave them the land they would give them their dead. He also was watching over a neighbor’s claim while he went to Dawson to record his claim.

Verbs and Run-ons His father had taken the dog sled and team and old Loren Hall had went to go secure his claim by recording it.

Sentence? Fragment? Or Run on? In town, the chase had been going on for 91 miles, he found the sheriff. Walt overheard some stampeders saying they were going to take Loren’s land because they had dogs and could beat Loren to Dawson and record his claim as theirs.

Sentence? Fragment? Or Run on? Since it had echoed other bad people hear it and they rode on their horse away so the man came out and walked home.

Great adjectives and verbs! Unharnessed Relentless Lurched Energetic Unstoppable Deceitful Valliant Vigorous Desperate Crafty Testy

Great sentences and word choice! It was a cold night when the stampeders came to town. Walt, knowing he had to protect the claim, followed them to see what they would do. Eventually, they stopped, unharnessed the sled dogs, and began to eat dinner.

Great sentences and word choice ….streaks of gold running through it.

Great sentences and word choice! Thinking fast, Walt used his whip to make the men let go. Hesitant if he should go on, Walt came to a halt, and rested his sore body.

Great sentences and word choice! Driving and dodging bullets, Walt kept on going. …that in the dirt of the yard was a soft hint of gold.

Other…. Possessives Walt Masters was protecting his friends claim. The claim jumpers were digging up gold in Loren Halls well.

Past or Present Tense? Newspaper article: In 1897 Walt Master, a boy from Alaska, is watching over his land. Loren Hall, his neighbor is out of town… In 1897 Walt Master, a boy from Alaska, was watching over his land. Loren Hall, his neighbor was out of town….

Past or Present Tense? They chased after him. After Walt had gone about a mile, the claim jumpers come and start yelling.

Past or Present Tense? A brave, courageous boy named Walt Masters is protecting his friend’s claim. A brave, courageous boy named Walt Masters was protecting his friend’s claim.

Commonly misspelled words Disappointed They’re There Their