WAGOLL (What A Good One Looks Like) Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 WAGOLL (What A Good One Looks Like) Clouds cover the sky, grey smudges against the blackness behind. There are no stars, and even the moon is only the slightest sliver of silver sporadically re-emerging and then subsumed. The wind is gently breathing around us, stirring itself. A flag flaps slightly against the flagpole, the sibilant rustle one of the few noises disturbing the almost-silence. Faint freckles of rain dot our skin, barely more than mist, but there’s a chill, a stillness in the air, a heaviness, an atmosphere of expectation. The world is waiting. What’s GOOD about this example?

Paper 1 Section B / Description Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Language P1, Question 5 Paper 1 Section B / Description Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively Revising and deploying effective descriptive features Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic Field: Words that link in terms of their meaning Synonym: Words that mean the same

His eyes are closed tightly: a mixture of grief and relief. Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 His skin shines darkly against the blackness beyond him, a fine sheen of sweat smudged with ash. Water cascades from his helmet in pearl-strings of droplets, glittering specks, streaking the accumulated grime. His eyes are closed tightly: a mixture of grief and relief. Behind him, the fire waves hungrily, shifting and dancing, prowling around the burning cab. The flames are sun-orange in the centre, cooled darker at the sides until they blend with the ash-black of the damaged truck. Bitter and acrid, the air tastes thick and congealed, choking smoke enveloping everything in a cloak of black and grey. The heat is oppressive. Unbearable.

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Main Task 2: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 2: Working Through the Process Paragraph 1: Describe an overview of the setting. If outside… start with the sky and then move downwards. If inside… start with the sound. Paragraph 2: Zoom in on a key character or detail. Try to include metaphors or similes, adjectives, adverbials and lists / triplets. If character… use pre-prepared character section. Zoom backwards (their past?) and zoom forwards (their future?) If detail… rely on the five senses AND think about what the detail means / represents. Why is it significant? Paragraph 3: Paragraph 4: 1 sentence paragraph… change the mood. Use a semi-colon, be dramatic. Keep the sentence short and declarative. The mood changer can be an event, the weather, a character, a sound… Paragraph 5: Describe the impact of the mood changer. Show a contrast to paragraphs 2 and 3. Use a contrasting semantic field! Use a metaphor or simile. Keeping linking in the five senses. Paragraph 6: Describe an overview of the setting again using phrases from the start. Stand back and zoom out. If the setting’s the same, have things coming full circle. If the setting’s different/changed, describe the impact of the event and change. A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture.

Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B Skill RED, AMBER, GREEN (RAG) Taking the image to bits Annotating the image Planning my response Structuring my response Understanding the features Using the features Using a wide vocabulary

Paper 1 Section B / Description Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Language P1, Question 5 Paper 1 Section B / Description Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively Revising and deploying effective descriptive features Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere