WABOLL (What A Bad One Looks Like) Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 WABOLL (What A Bad One Looks Like) The fire is hot and there’s lots of smoke. The fireman looks like the water’s cooling him down. The truck is on fire. The abysmal abyss, the void of shadows eloquently erupts, evolving into an absence. Sandra was tall and slim with long blonde hair and blue eyes. He was a deadly ninja assassin who’d been told to kill the presidents of two countries using his deadly skills. Chris Steel dropped from the helicopter clutching all his guns and knives… The orcs had over-run the camp, feasting on human flesh with their goblin allies. The wizards had been unable to turn the tide of battle The space-ship zoomed across the horizon, lasers flashing as they zapped the aliens from the sky, their tentacles landing sizzling on the planet below. Mandy was sad. She felt insecure because of the bullies. They’d ruined every day of her life until she felt like crying inside. She knew she was special, but no-one seemed to understand her. What’s WRONG with these examples?

Paper 1 Section B / Description Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Language P1, Question 5 Paper 1 Section B / Description Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively Revising and deploying effective descriptive features Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere

Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Recapping Descriptive Features Descriptive Features Metaphor Simile Personification Juxtaposition Pathetic Fallacy Alliteration Sibilance Onomatopoeia The five senses Adjectives Adverbs Try to list as many descriptive features as possible, linked to the level of challenge below. Top Challenge: Explain the effect / impact Mid Challenge: Exemplify (give an example) Low Challenge: Define it (what is it?)

Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Recapping Descriptive Features Key Descriptive Features Metaphor Simile Personification Juxtaposition / Contrast Pathetic Fallacy Alliteration / Sibilance Sibilance Onomatopoeia The five senses Adjectives Adverbs Try to list as many descriptive features as possible, linked to the level of challenge below. Top Challenge: Explain the effect / impact Mid Challenge: Exemplify (give an example) Low Challenge: Define it (what is it?)

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic Field: Words that link in terms of their meaning Synonym: Words that mean the same

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic field: Grey clouds Stone Grave Bushes Brown Crumbling Abandoned Decaying Isolated Rocky Closed

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic field: Grey clouds Stone Grave Bushes Brown Crumbling Abandoned Decaying Isolated Rocky Closed

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic field: Grey clouds Stone Grave Bushes Brown Crumbling Abandoned Decaying Isolated Rocky Closed Sight: scrubby, yellow-brown Smell: Dry, grassy, powdery

Main Task 1: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 1: Working Through the Process A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture. Semantic field: Grey clouds Stone Grave Bushes Brown Crumbling Abandoned Decaying Isolated Rocky Closed Sight: scrubby, yellow-brown Smell: Dry, grassy, powdery Feature: Simile As untamed and wild as beard-hair.

Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 There’s a yellow-brown scrub of undergrowth outside the house, scruffy as an untended beard. It smells dry and powdery. The leaves shiver as I pass, fallen ones crinkling below my toes like unwanted paper.

Main Task 2: Working Through the Process Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Main Task 2: Working Through the Process Paragraph 1: Describe an overview of the setting. If outside… start with the sky and then move downwards. If inside… start with the sound. Paragraph 2: Zoom in on a key character or detail. Try to include metaphors or similes, adjectives, adverbials and lists / triplets. If character… use pre-prepared character section. Zoom backwards (their past?) and zoom forwards (their future?) If detail… rely on the five senses AND think about what the detail means / represents. Why is it significant? Paragraph 3: Paragraph 4: 1 sentence paragraph… change the mood. Use a semi-colon, be dramatic. Keep the sentence short and declarative. The mood changer can be an event, the weather, a character, a sound… Paragraph 5: Describe the impact of the mood changer. Show a contrast to paragraphs 2 and 3. Use a contrasting semantic field! Use a metaphor or simile. Keeping linking in the five senses. Paragraph 6: Describe an overview of the setting again using phrases from the start. Stand back and zoom out. If the setting’s the same, have things coming full circle. If the setting’s different/changed, describe the impact of the event and change. A local magazine is asking people to contribute creative writing. Write a description suggested by this picture.

Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Plenary: RAG-ing Myself (Paper 1, Section B Skill RED, AMBER, GREEN (RAG) Taking the image to bits Annotating the image Planning my response Structuring my response Understanding the features Using the features Using a wide vocabulary

Paper 1 Section B / Description Today’s Date: 22 February 2019 Language P1, Question 5 Paper 1 Section B / Description Planning and structuring Paper 1, Section B responses effectively Revising and deploying effective descriptive features Imagery, metaphor, five senses, synonym, semantic field, atmosphere