Narrative Writing #11

Action Help Brainstorming back of ambulance emergency room falling the breaks aren’t working vet picks up puppy Help accident animal child alone lost life Action dog searching for owner runs into burning building quick take my hand knows there is a problem I cant breathe screams we’ve only got 10 seconds trying to escape everything looks the same stuck in a cave boat going the wrong way trapped no one knows where I am

Brainstorm again and think “action movie” Happiness

Writing a better follow on sentence Here are 6 strong techniques to make your writing fantastic….

Restate the sentence in other way Describe an outstanding feature of the subject Or something unique about the subject Restate the sentence in other way Add more information about what you want to tell the reader Explain what the character is thinking Explain more about what the character is doing Provide more detail on the setting Strunk, W (Revised 2011). The Elements of Style. USA: The Elements of Style Press. www.chrisbauman.com.au

請描述關於主題的特色或其獨特之處。 請用別種方式重述句子 。 告訴讀者你想傳達的訊息是甚麼。 請說明主角人物的想法。 請說明主角人物要做些甚麼。 請提供多一些有關故事背景設定的細節。 Strunk, W (Revised 2011). The Elements of Style. USA: The Elements of Style Press. www.chrisbauman.com.au

Describe a feature Staring at my reflection in the plane window, trying not to think of the past, I ponder the person waiting for me. Would she like what she sees? I have changed a lot since she last saw me. No longer afraid of the water, I am the fittest I have ever been, swimming 10 kilometers every day. My strong shoulders and penetrating gaze are a real contrast to the man that she once referred to as childlike.

Describe a feature Staring at my reflection in the plane window, trying not to think of the past, I ponder the person waiting for me. Would she like what she sees? I have changed a lot since she last saw me, with the scars of a challenging lifestyle still visible, despite the plastic surgery. I suppose the knife wound running down my cheek is a part of me now.

Describe an outstanding feature of the subject You Try – part 1 of 5 Describe an outstanding feature of the subject The unknown soldier following me has done something unexpected, breaking his pattern, getting closer to his quarry, me. Describe either yourself or the unknown soldier….

Describe an outstanding feature of the subject You Try - 2 Describe an outstanding feature of the subject “Why are you doing this?” Describe one feature of the person

Describe an outstanding feature of the subject You Try - 3 Describe an outstanding feature of the subject Putting aside our past differences, I stared at my friend sitting opposite me. Describe one feature of the person sitting opposite

Describe an outstanding feature of the subject You Try - 4 Describe an outstanding feature of the subject Physically drained, I can see the end, however my journey is only just beginning. Describe one feature that you have

Describe an outstanding feature of the subject You Try - 5 Describe an outstanding feature of the subject A strong wind pushes against my body, but I keep climbing, knowing my training will ensure victory. Describe one feature that you have

1.Now thinking more quickly Lesson 1.Now thinking more quickly 2. The follow on sentence _ describing a feature